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Discussion in 'Creative Traditional' started by lanaia74, Nov 4, 2006.



    lanaia74 New Member

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    In the eerie dead of night
    she slowly stirs her cauldron
    To see her would give you such a fright
    She laughs her haunting laugh just for fun.

    She attempts to stir her brew
    As it is a sell for an unknowing soul
    As the wolves howl so low
    And she stirs and stirs trying to beat the rising sun.

    She chants over her black pot
    Incantations to cast her spell
    That she intends to plot
    And she continues to stir hoping it won't fail.

    The ravens fly against the almost daylight sky
    And she continues to stir
    Hoping to keep the daylight at bay
    So she can finish before anything occurs.

    She conjures the prince of darkness for help
    So her spell will work
    So she can laugh at the unknowing person's yelp
    She thinks she is so curt.


    Posted By lanaia74 | Nov 4, 2006
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    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    what does curt mean? good Halloween poem not sure about everyday use though
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    I like the poem and what you're trying to say, but think it could use some work to smooth out some rough spots. It is descriptive, I could actually see the witch stirring the brew in the cauldron, trying to finish the spell before dawn.
    I, too, wonder about the last line. What's curt?
    Gail


    Posted By butchiesmom | Nov 7, 2006
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