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    Sally Roberts Forestdawn

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    Far away beyond
    our visions of sight,
    Alive with the secrets
    of grand delight.
    Beneath the green-gold
    and mossy ground,
    Is where a magickal
    kingdom is found.

    Each creature is said
    to have beautiful wings,
    They can really create
    the most wonderful things.
    Floating and flying
    like in faerie tale lore,
    But truthfully speaking
    there's so very much more.

    They all have two pouches
    one on each side,
    That is where some of those
    secrets abide.
    They'll fill up their pouches
    from faraway lands,
    Known only to them
    as the Silver Sands.

    Into every window
    the faerie's will creep,
    To find every child
    all sound asleep.
    They'll kiss all the children
    with a sprinkle of sand,
    And that's how the story
    of the sandman began.

    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    this is great Sally, i think it was good that you gaine dit a legend to tie it in with,
    peopel like familiar things,
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    Dear Sally:giftrose:,

    I had to laugh at myself because, just from the opening verse....oh I knew I was in for a treat!!!! I imagined me and my kids (if I had any, lol) fighting for the couch to watch your story ::fan1: :yeahbaby: :p :partytime: Aww, this was fantabulous Sally. The story, the imagery, the flow, perfect sequence, word selection, rhythm, and rhyme. Beautifully executed Sally!!!!! I love your poetry as I have stated its warming, good medicine, has a homey quality, memorable messages, and some, like this has a fabulous mystical element to it. Those last two lines----->And that's how the story of the sandman began, IS CLASSIC!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Woooohoooo!!!! Loved it Sally, and thank you for sharing!!

    {{{~~**Dr. Rob**~~}}};)2

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    Ah..., you made me
    feel as if ' just got
    told a bedtime story.

    That's nice.

    :phonecall: Where's ...

    Ms sandman...:ss-wink:


    Posted By Jeez | Mar 26, 2007
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    Bear JPiC Contributor

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    Beautiful write Sally some wonderful visions you have created in this poem, It has a fabulous mystical element magnificent poem
    hugs kisses
    tom


    Posted By Bear | Mar 26, 2007
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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Sally, this is a totally lovely story of pre-sandman days! My kids will love it!! Thanks.

    Nomad

    Curtis Spider Lee Curtis Spider Lee

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    Woooo..... I enjoyed the way you have set your mind free in such a creative way! Very nice write Sally! ENCORE!!! ENCORE!!

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    Great read, Sally! I love reading your works...they always are a real treat.


    Posted By Benny | Mar 31, 2007
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    Sally Roberts Forestdawn

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    Merry Meet Everyone:

    Benny: Thanx. I try to bring some kind of emotional bond to the reader through my poetry. It looks like I succeeded with this one. Thanks.

    Spider: Your warmest comment has warmed my heart. I glad it made you smile.

    Nomad: I'm very happy to hear your kids will enjoy this one. I was actually watching my daughter (who's 8) sleep when I wrote "Silver Sands"

    Bear: Thanks tom, Yep, I was writing it in a mystical way. and I succeeded in bringing on the magick! Thank you.

    Jeez: Good-night Sleep-tight. I'm glad I could make you feel warm as a cosy blanket.

    Kim: I sit humbled Kim, Your comments are always so heartfelt and appreciated. I love to write emotional poetry and I try very hard to polish everyone I write.

    Erik: I love magickal legends and I strive to make them come to life in my poems. Thanks for your comment.


    Blesses be

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