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    ~Serenity~ ~Pixie Princess~

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    I suppose if poetry had sketches, this'd be one. Just something I randomly wanted to get out of my head -- before I forgot it completely! Expect a rewrite sometime, not necessarily in the near future... Hah

    Smiles!,
    ~Serenity~


    Simple Enigma
    this question, does it bother you?
    this puzzle, does it stump you?

    too young to be this old
    too light to be so dark

    a problem you cant unravel
    a mystery you cant logic

    so logically paradoxical
    so simply enigmatic

    face it, you cant wrap your head around this
    face it, you cant get inside the heart of this

    limitlessly constricted
    ceaselessly discontinuous

    of course i dont make sense to you
    of course you simply cant understand

    a prisoner of freedom,
    a reserved hedonist

    to know the real me, youve gotta forget reality
    to know the real me, youve gotta drop convention

    so confusedly enlightened,
    so simply complex

    explore the realm of things that might never be
    explore the ideas that really shouldnt be

    too scared to be this brave,
    too weak to be this strong

    nothing has to make sense in order to be,
    nothing has to be strictly possible just to be

    too big to be this small,
    too determined to be so meek

    so you see, something you wont understand
    im not something you can understand


    Posted By ~Serenity~ | Aug 3, 2007
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    ~Serenity~

    You are wise beyond your years.... "So simply complex"... (I luv that line...)

    Does anybody really know anyone, anyhow? It's a poser... A poem of oxymorons, nice write for off the top of your head - can't wait to see the rewrite, so don't take TOO long.. Hah!

    Smiles!


    Posted By lasher | Aug 3, 2007
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    Dear ~ Serenity~,

    This was simply fantabulous! I love when you get deep in thought and grace us with the results. I love the opposing forces here. The lines I have quoted (and trust me, it was difficult not to quote the entire poem) are wisdom at its best. The line in lighter purple is amazing and classic! I absolutely love it! The lines in darker purple are intense and prodded me to thinking about many things. Perhaps my own simple enigma. You have outdone yourself with this one Ms Serenity. I read this several times already, and will be back to read several times more. Thank you sooo much for posting this. An excellent rating!

    Kim :)
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Nice write SEREN - this is a puzzle really - but not puzzling - if that makes sense... Shunning conventionality (is that even a word?) is what this poem is about to me; making right and equal that which has always been the antithesis of both being "correct" and unequal - if that makes sense...

    Anyway - this is a very intriguing write and I'm sure a lot of us have felt similar feelings within, but just didn't know how to really put it down on paper - or computer screen as it is... I applaud you for this write! My favorite stanzas:

    So beautifully and complicatedly blissful LOL - very intriguing write.
    Almost like a algebraic equation or some type of geometrical gem...

    Thanx for the sharing ;)

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Aug 3, 2007
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    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    very cool,
    I see that this was both very unique and quisical,
    something that works the mind,
    and ends with confusion if you sought the logical one you say mostly well your wrong,
    very nice

    ~Serenity~ ~Pixie Princess~

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    hey guys! thanks so much ^_^

    Lasher -- hehe we'll see I suppose, but thanks so much for the lovely comment and for taking the time to stop by ^-^ hehe you make me blush :p

    MsPD -- hehe actually, those two in light are my favourite from the poem. i'll definitely keep them when i get around to a rewrite, and for most of the ones you highlighted i would like to keep the idea, if not the words. i always love to hear that i made you think, too ;) thanks so much for stopping by to comment and read, it always means so much to me

    MsJ -- hehe your reply sounds a lot like my poem ;) i'm so glad you enjoyed it, and even more glad that it got you to think, that really means a lot to me so thank you very much MsJ for taking the time ^-^

    Erik -- hehehe thanks so much for taking the time, it's wonderful to hear another's thoughts on this. OHOH and by the wayy... im absolutely LOVING that site, it's amazingly gorgeous -- you and MsJ must've worked on that alot, and it's absolutely wonderful!

    Smiles!,
    ~Serenity~


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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Thanx SEREN - there's a lot of hours that went into getting ERIK's website up.
    But most recently - I've been doing work on your Auntie's website TreeGood.com - Home
    It's sure to be AWESOME once finished!

    Jacquii.


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    Serenity...I LOVE this poem...very deep thoughts and explorations of the subconscious...how old did u say you were? LOL! I love your brain!

    too scared to be this brave,
    too weak to be this strong


    these two lines epitomize much of mankind trying to make it through life today

    nothing has to make sense in order to be,
    nothing has to be strictly possible just to be


    These two above are my very favorite...some things just ARE and no amount of deducing, supposing, clarifying or calculating will change that. Wonderful, wonderful write!!

    Nomad
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    A SEDUCTIVE write definitely! - just had to add an additional commentary

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Aug 4, 2007
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    ~Serenity~ ~Pixie Princess~

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    hehe thanks MsJ!

    And MsNomad!! Hehehe thanks so much ^_^ I'm blushing :blush: You always manage to point out something I overlook in my own poem -- I hadn't stopped to consider the idea that anything in here would relate to mankind in general... That, and hearing that my poems make me sound older :D

    Smiles!,
    ~Serenity~

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