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    Fate, it seems, is not without a sense of irony…

    I knew I was in love
    When I caught the reflection of myself
    In the rearview mirror…
    …Of our minivan

    You, me, and the baby
    I’m driving the speed limit
    While clutching the wheel with both hands
    Sitting straight up in the seat
    Straps firmly secured against my shoulder
    And around my waist
    And I’ll be darn!
    Was that a smile on my face?

    Whatever happened to the gangster I used to be?
    The Killer, Drug Dealer,
    Neighborhood, all-around bad-ass nigga
    When did he go missing?
    If somebody was to drag the river
    Would they find his body at the bottom;
    Sleeping with the fishes?

    At 55mph, you can’t see my past life
    Behind these dark eyes
    I’m like a double agent or sleeper cell
    With ties to various criminal enterprises
    I carry secrets of stolen lives
    And at 55mph you don’t even realize
    You’ve been sleeping with the nme

    Sometimes I find myself wondering about who I’ve become
    Some dark-skinned middle-class yuckie
    A mid-level manager with white-boys for friends
    But who secretly want to shuck me
    Because niggers aint supposed to be in suits…

    I’m like a predator masking as something else
    A carnivore in a herd of wild meat
    Beneath my smiles and polite mannerism
    Lies a growling, crouching beast

    I’m watching my neighbor bend her tight little ass over
    Begging me to tap it
    I walk out to get the paper
    It’d be so easy to snatch it
    But instead,…
    “Hi, good morning!”

    I miss the feel of the pistol-grip
    The hard rubber and cold steel
    I miss the sound of sirens
    And ghetto chariots rumbling bass
    From 18 inch sub woofers
    I miss the bitches and the gun-play

    Here I am, sitting at a ninety-degree angle
    In a fucking mini-van

    Fate, it seems, is not without a sense of irony

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    Hey now TBP,

    You've got yourself a sharp pencil.....

    This shows what even the baddest of the bad is willing to give up for the love of a woman and family - givin' up money, women, drugs and guns.... Especially if it's all one knows.

    The growling, crouching beast may be suppressed for now, but he'll be there for when one needs him - some things are not forgotten.....

    I enjoy your writing - it's no-nonsense, straight in your face life - and it comes at you fast.
    Thanx TBP....


    Posted By lasher | Sep 30, 2007
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    PaintedDiary JPiC Mentor

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    Hey BP,

    Lasher said it perfectly. :wow: I absolutely loved this! What I love most about your writing is the fact that it is so memorable....classics. Straight-up, quick no BS style, just me and my words, and here it is. This one touched me as well. You got allot of love in you and your family are blessed to have you and you blessed to have them. Keep doin' your than BP. Beautiful.

    Dr. Rob ;)

    p.s. I was wondering about you, you have not answered my PM's...so I am definitely glad to see a new write. Like I said simply...Beautiful!

    JolieH JPiC Contributor

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    Frederick,
    You did it again, another terrific poem. This poem has so much to say - that guy in the suit, in the mirror, is a hero to his own fate. He represents the strength we all search for within ourselves to succeed in this world. The seat belt in the beginning holding this big strong soul upright get this poem rolling. He drives straight threw hell and doesn't flinch - his love an unpenetratable shield.

    What a guy, and what I admire most about him is the ink spot on his pocket.


    Posted By JolieH | Sep 30, 2007
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    PaintedDiary JPiC Mentor

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    Came back for another read! :bravothanx: Beautiful and an Excellent rating BP!!!!!!!!!!!

    PD ;)
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    Whew! I love this collaboration of the fierce bad guy and the other side of the coin...the seemingly reformed family man. Some things are important enough to give up a lifestyle for, as your poem proves, and family is definitely one of them. What made this poem have even a greater impact on me is the comparison to "sleeper agents", etc. because some of my favorite everyday reading is espionage novels. I've read everything by Robert Ludlum twice and wish he was still alive to write more.

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