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Discussion in 'Spoken Word & Freestyle' started by ¤Me¤, Feb 22, 2008.



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    Something happened for the first time with you,
    You bled your power as silent rivers on the pavement,
    So blue,

    You scratched your legs on the stone frightfully,
    So blue,
    Vengeance of the quiet memories grew inside you,
    Oh why, you said, why am I so blue?

    Something happened for the first time with you,
    You fled from your watchful tower as bellowing streams in the wind,
    So blue,

    You tiptoed underneath my skin like part of me,
    But yet when standing up,
    You were standing next to me,
    Oh, I then said, why are we so blue?

    You then kissed me on the cheek and said:
    White I would despise,
    But I love the way you are so blue,
    Oh so blue


    Posted By ¤Me¤ | Feb 22, 2008
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    Hiya Liisi ..... excellent poem... only error I can see.. is a small one.


    in bold it should be were..... other than that ..... this is a delightful poem such smooth transition from one stanza to the next .. I read it outloud a few times... I really enjoyed this one... adding it too my favorites :)

    Mysty


    Posted By Mysty | Feb 23, 2008
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    Edited, thanks for noticing, hah. And thanks for the comment. ;)


    Posted By ¤Me¤ | Feb 23, 2008
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