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    Kit Carson JPiC Contributor

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    Salt water flowing through your veins

    Sailor you will never be free

    Hear the sea calling out your names

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    You feel it now in your deepest pains

    Mind and body tied to the sea

    Salt water flowing through your veins

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    So go ahead and claim your fames

    Poet you will return to me

    Hear the sea calling out your names

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    And even though your lifeline wanes

    In my heart you will always be

    Salt water flowing through your veins

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    We are no longer playing games

    Lover bound for eternity

    Hear the sea calling out your names

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    Sailor/poet forever reigns

    With king upon the throne you see

    Salt water flowing through your veins

    Hear the sea calling out your names

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    M.J. Carson

    10-19-2007


    Posted By Kit Carson | Oct 19, 2007
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    JolieH JPiC Contributor

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    I think she loves you Kit. She needs your voice to venerate her vestige. You are a treasure to the great ocean spirit.

    Have you considered taking residence on a yacht?


    Posted By JolieH | Oct 19, 2007
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    Kit Carson JPiC Contributor

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    Many a time...I would have to hide in the bilges I'm afraid...might be worth it. Thank you very much my friend...you found that quick, lol.


    Posted By Kit Carson | Oct 19, 2007
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    Hey now Kit,

    Nice write... Your choice of form and structure gives it substance and flow............
    This was fun to read; nicely put together.....
    I enjoyed mucho.............


    Posted By lasher | Oct 20, 2007
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    I love, love, LOVE the Villanelle ... you certainly did it justice. Thank-you for sharing.
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    Dear Kit,

    When you scribe about the ocean I can see it. You breath it into your words, you are the sea. This was a flawless Villanelle, and your interpretation of the sea was flawless. I read this several times and went into my favorites Kit. I LOVE your sea poems. I can see the paintings in all of them, you give the sea life in your work and that is amazing,as you are. Love y my friend!

    Kim :)

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