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    MetricalSonneteer In mind to beat Petrarch!

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    Notice that the opening lines' phrases are the same as the rhymes, and that for the first four lines, every argument is one line long, then for the next set it's two lines an argument, and that the third quatrain is a whole argument in itself (so it's 1, 2 and 4 lines an argument, as the quatrains go along).

    Sonnet LI: Pushkin Boomerang
    That thou shouldst love me, rend’ring me aloft;
    That I should see mine image in thine eye;
    That I should be – by thee – touched, till I die;
    That thou shouldst hear my song from the choir-loft.
    That thou shouldst happily commence to say
    That thou shouldst evermore bestow me gay;
    That I should e’er renounce all but the love
    That I should fix in me, none shall remove.
    That thou shouldst never leave, the love we’ve both
    That I should well assume is not just mine –
    That thou shouldst crave as well, as in our troth,
    That I should, boomerang, to thee e’er pine.
    But fantasy in Third Conditional?
    A Pushkin sonnet, love transitional.

    Jonny

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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Fantastico!! Bellisimo!!

    This is a superb sonnet...I shall have to take a turn at it.

    Loved it!

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    superd penning Metrical. beautiful love sonnet.
    handshakes
    Bear


    Posted By Bear | Mar 26, 2007
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    Dear Metrical,

    Boy have you raised to bar hun. Sheesh!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I knew I should have taken that poetry class! LOLOL Seriously though, this was some kind of masterful craftsmanship. I am in awe of this, and know that you put me to shame. LOLOL Brilliant!!!!!!

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