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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    New Challenge In The Creativity Outlet


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Jul 23, 2007
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    This writing exercise is inspired by a brilliant exercise I recently read in
    The Practice of Poetry: Writing Exercises From Poets Who Teach


    You've heard snippets from songs or proverbs, old sayings, cliches and the like. Well this exercise will give you a chance to be inspired by those favorite sayings and such... If you have no favorite proverb, a great place to start is JPiC's Random Quote system. We've a great assortment of fabulous quotes contributed by the entire JPiC Community! Anyway - moving on....

    Examples:
    • She's a brick house.
    • Between the devil and the deep blue sea.
    • One foot in the grave.
    • A stitch in time saves nine.
    • Don't count your chickens before they hatch.
    • Someday my prince will come.
    etcetera etcetera etcetera and etcetera....


    The Exercise:

    • Write a 20 line poem. Any format. Any rhyme scheme.
    • The title of your poem must be the quote, cliche, saying, old song snippet, etc...
    • The inspiration for your poem must be the quote, cliche, saying, old song snippet, etc...
    • Choose any 6 words/phrases from the list of 20 below. They MUST be used in your poem:
      • apple cider --- purple hyacinth
      • silky mane --- vinegar
      • soda fountain --- vomit
      • cornrows --- buttermilk
      • amber rock --- cloud
      • vermouth --- kudzu
      • Grandma --- interupt
      • voice --- cardinal
      • needle --- kool-aid packet
      • races --- laudanum
    The point of this exercise is so that you may be inspired by the daily mundane and work that essense into your poetry. You will most likely be surprised that such a saying or quote, whatever, could inspire you to write.

    The benefit of this exercise will allow you to see that even though Writers Block may be next door - Wherever you are - you do indeed have your poetic skill, a pen & pad (hopefully) and the inspiration to triumph over... :)

    Enjoy AND Happy posting!

    btw - The Practice of Poetry

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    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Jul 23, 2007
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    Caught Between a Rock and a Hard Place

    Caught Between a Rock and a Hard Place


    What have I gotten my self into?
    I never should have left the group.
    The setting sun casts my shadow
    Upon the amber rock behind me
    I hear a rustle from the brush ahead
    My heart now races as I focus…
    Now seeing what made the noise
    The silky mane of a lion
    Approaching slowly towards me
    I scream out but can’t find my voice
    One needle tipped tranquilizer dart left
    My only way out is accuracy
    Gun in position as sweat beads
    Running into my eyes, blurring my vision
    The beast picks up speed
    Lunging into the air
    Blocking out the sun, this hairy cloud
    As I squeeze the trigger, my aim is true
    Death lies inches from me
    As vomit fills my mouth…


    Posted By Checkmate | Jul 25, 2007
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    :wow: Scott, I didn't and couldn't blink! Very powerful and riveting! Just amazing!

    Kim :) I dare not post anything after that great write!
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    I hear a rustle from the brush ahead
    My heart now races as I focus…
    Now seeing what made the noise
    The silky mane of a lion
    Approaching slowly towards me

    Riveting is absolutely correct!
    Great write SCOTT - very enjoyable!
    Thanx for posting it ;)

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Jul 25, 2007
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    thanks for the comments ladies...gonna try another one...been in a slump lately, but starting to get going again...vacation last week took alot out of me and this is my long work week...but the challenges help...absolutely love the site...bringing my poetry to new levels


    Posted By Checkmate | Jul 25, 2007
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    That's so funny that you have that book on here.. cuz in both of my creative writing classes at my community college we had to get that book and we did various exercises from it.. ;)
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    Yes! It's an AWESOME book! I've only read a few of the writing exercises thus far - but I'm sure there will be other Creativity Outlet posts inspired from Practice of Poetry.

    So MS APRYL - are you gonna attempt the Inspired By A Cliche exercise???

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Jul 28, 2007
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    ONE MAN’S MEDICINE IS ANOTHER MAN’S POISON

    Barkeep, make me one of those purple hyacinth drinks
    You mean a chrysanthemum?
    Yeah, with vermouth and laudanum
    You mean absinthe
    Sure, whatever. I need to see what they saw.
    You mean Dickens and Barrett and Hemingway? Why, to spark your creativity?
    Yes a challenge was issued
    I hate to interrupt your train of thought
    but I’ve seen your stuff
    you’ve been to the edge already
    Why would you go back?
    Just fix me the drink please
    Haven’t you seen it all before?
    I need to find my voice
    I need to see what they saw
    They are famous
    But you did everything
    but stick a needle in your arm
    tell me what it was like
    to smoke the finest hash
    through your multi-chambered pipe

    You mean when the walls
    begin to breath and vibrate
    and everything goes one dimensional
    time stands still and you live
    every breath and you are
    convinced that you have opened
    a window to your soul
    you mean like that?
    oh yeah, I’ve seen what they saw…


    Posted By Kit Carson | Jul 29, 2007
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    My goodness, Checkmate and Kit...you guys have set the bar way high! These are fabulous poems, and they catch your attention from the first line...wonderfully and creatively penned.

    Great writes Gentlemen!!

    Ms. J., I have that book...now whether I opened it, I can't remember...shall have to dig it out for sure now!

    Nomad
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    Here's mine:

    She’s a brick house!
    She builds you up
    brick by brick
    don’t interrupt her scheme
    as solidly as she shines
    through the Amber rock
    perfectly set in place
    like cornrows in her world
    life races through her mind
    buttermilk river flows
    down memory lane
    no stone unturned
    when she takes over
    championing causes
    resilient and steadfast
    mortar and clay
    resounding with
    loyalty as the true
    Mother Earth emerges
    silky mane casting
    protection over all
    of her house.

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    Therese,

    Let me guess! This is you! I can see your poetic-self clearly. My Fav:

    JErry
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    Nice! Inspired visions of Moulin Rouge LOL

    It's a good one - very insightful and well written!

    WHOA MS N - this is a very strong write!
    Brick house indeed.

    Thanx YAWL for posting!
    Makes the cliche-thing more than just a cliche eh?

    JAcquii.:TUBA:


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Aug 3, 2007
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    Anyway - this is a very spur-of-the-moment write... I was thinking something along the lines of "Don't count your chickens before they hatch" as being a good sound piece of advice - So to that I say OK LOL - Anyway - kinda abstract kinda weird - but my Muse likes that kinda stuff - so I present you with....


    Don't Count Your Chickens Before They Hatch

    The shadowless apple cider glass sits
    on the window ledge, alongside Mama's apple pie,
    purple hyacinth in vase, and the amber rock.

    Dare I reach for just a sip? Just one.

    A cardinal whispers his song in falsetto voice
    (the window so clear I can see his eyes smiling)
    and my cornrows are interupting my nappy reverie.

    I'd swear it's nice-n-cool. It looks it.

    The goats are neying. Loudly. The horse with his
    silky mane could not possibly be louder. Perhaps
    it's the vermouth, the gin maybe, the rum, the ice?

    Shall I reach for that glass? Maybe?

    On the ranch hustle-and-bustle, tis 'bout time
    to get the new shingles laid, the floor swept,
    the cows milked and satiated, the eggs counted.

    I sure would like just a taste. Just one.

    Simply would be better than such a stale kool-aid
    packet, Mama's apple cider. Apple pie clouds my mind,
    a heaven of sorts: hamhocks, greens, hushpuppies.

    I wonder. Do hyacinth blooms taste good?



    Copyright © 2007 - Jacquii Cooke

    :twitcy: kinda kuntry tehehehe....


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Aug 3, 2007
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    very cool msJ guess you didn't get that cider,
    the idea was toying with that moment and very playful so the poem matched its ideals
    very good
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    LOL - the thought of shadowless apple cider just didn't really do it for me :p

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Aug 3, 2007
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    lol shadowless I overlooked that, I guess it less appealing
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    One Foot in the Grave


    Awake but slipping into laudanum dreams,
    life to harsh to cloud the reality of living.
    Acrid bitter vomit residue, the taste of
    having to deal with the here and now today.
    If only one could live the stories and adventures,
    the other worldly lives, like Harry Potter's.

    Reality interupts and life is jolted back
    into the here and now, and one thinks
    "Is life really any different with the absence
    of soda fountain secrets and fairytale endings?"
    No vermouth to ebb the tide of reality
    that crawls across the amber rock.

    In those dreams of yesteryear,
    the wishes that blind the realism,
    the true meaning of life as Grandma taught.
    We are born, we grow, we live, we die,
    each experiencing our own events
    and no matter what, life goes on and on.

    But we are all the same
    One foot in the grave from the very start.


    Posted By Mysty | Aug 3, 2007
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    :wow::wow: Fantabulous writes everyone!

    Kim ;)

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    “Death Is Easy, It’s the Dying That’s Tough!”

    this took me three days to write

    “Death Is Easy, It’s the Dying That’s Tough!”

    Wincing
    changes into
    shaking and convulsing
    a thick cloud of suffering
    prevails

    Her voice
    muted by pain.
    Laudanum as morphine
    races deft into a needle
    eyes roll

    She speaks
    Blessings for all.
    Children weep Grandma’s name
    As she gurgles and gasps for air
    Fading

    We watch
    The transition
    From affliction to death
    Stillness, interrupts agony
    With peace.

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