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    alanmdouglas ALAN the JPiCan of Grumps Royalty

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    New Challenge In The Creativity Outlet
    Spark Your Creativity #7 (10-Word Exercise)

    alanmdouglas ALAN the JPiCan of Grumps Royalty

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    Dear Friends,

    Here are 10 words for you to use in a poem. Each word can be modified, ie leaf could be used as leaves, but a word cannot be "included" as part of a longer word that it has no assocoiation with, ie band could NOT be used as abandonment !

    For those who have not done this before, don't try to use all the words at once - just make upany line with 2 or 3 - then see if you can add a 2nd line with another 1 or 2, and so on - you may well find that as you squeeze out your sentences, that some idea towards which to aim will formulate, and then you can go back over the poem to refine it in that direction.

    When you do that, you might change away from a set word completely, so I always add a * to the set words to avoid that. Also, it helps those reading to spot them easily.

    Here are your ten words :

    peace combine rubbish alternative resource
    pear positive comeuppance quick quiet

    Good luck, and if you are too shy to post any attempts, PM them to me and I will offer guidance.

    Love
    Alan

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    The Verdict


    Quiet was the room as she reached for the paper next to the pear.
    Awaiting the verdict, the outcome was positive and clear.
    With combined resources, and the defense team's rubbish;
    Add testimony and evidence, no alternative, the jurors must punish.
    The sentence would be harsh with quick comeuppance.


    V3


    Posted By v3sista | Feb 6, 2007
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    tehehhee - Must've been watching MSNBC a little earlier V :p --- Nice write - I may even try putting some lines down a little later!

    Thanx for the share ;)

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Feb 6, 2007
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    A positive alternative resource
    such as space camp,
    for boys being reared today
    may beget peace and longed-for quiet
    in homes previously allowing
    modern “rubbish” to be viewed on television
    combined with quick reprisals for wrongdoing.
    I myself have sat many an hour under that old pear tree
    planning and plotting how they will get their comeuppance!

    ©nomadicrhymer
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Awwwww! Someone talks of redemption for a destiny long-fought, hard-sought!
    Nice challenge answer MS N!

    Jacquii.:smokin:


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Feb 7, 2007
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    alanmdouglas ALAN the JPiCan of Grumps Royalty

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    Dear V and Therese,

    Now THIS is why I lovethese 10 word challenges.

    When setting the words, I never have the slightest idea WHERE they will lead a poet's muse - cuz the answers are so varied and covering such a wide area of human (or beyond) experience !

    Ladies, I compliment you both for excellent creativity. V, I like the thought, and also very much how tightly you wrote - how FEW other words you needed to gobble up the 10 words and make a meaningful statement and poem.

    Th, love the thought too, sounds like long-suffering patience of a parent has just had it's revenge !

    Well done to both of you.

    Now, as for the rest, these recalcitrant other poets lurking in the shadows with a half-formed idea .... we are watching you, come on, fess up, you have a poem wafting around there somewhere !

    Love
    Alan
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    I would have an entire idea - but my Muse is on vacation :sheep:

    Jacquii.


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    The pear dropped quick and hard
    on a pile of rubbish in the quiet morn
    splintering the peace of birds and bees combined
    whose alternative was to twitter and buzz madly
    with positively no resource to serve the culprit
    its comeuppance!

    nomadicrhymer

    alanmdouglas ALAN the JPiCan of Grumps Royalty

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    Dear Therese,

    You're on a roll, perhaps even a rubbish pile ! (No aspersions intended) Excellent use of the words to tell another precise story.

    I'm glad you did another, that is always an option, no limit to a poet's creativity.

    Love
    Alan
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    more like on a rubbish roll...but this is a fun one!
    If Ms. J wants to claim this one she can, since her muse took off so rudely!!
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    I'm mad at this write THERESE :p
    You just showing out now :p :joke:
    Excellent stuff - I sure'd like to find my Muse lol

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Feb 7, 2007
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    Hey, Ms. J, when you have work like your super fab stuff, your muse deserves a vacation!!

    Nomad
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    LOL - OK - This makes me feel better :p

    Jacquii.


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    For Ms. J!

    "Oh be quiet!" and "Quick! combine Alternative music
    pure rubbish to MY ears! with rap...
    compared to positive Christian Gospel
    surely a resource to turn heathens from
    getting their comeuppance and missing out on
    the golden pear of peace from the Tree of Life!"

    Nomad
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    OK - non-rehearsed AND off-top:


    Drama-game Played


    I wonder if Rumpelstiltskin ever combined
    cocaine and wine whilst trickin' poor ole Girl.
    "Rubbish," one may say, quietly quick: Divine.
    Yet, I wonder if ever a resource he swirled:

    Peace rather than gold. "It would'a been positively
    fierce if he'd dropped the pear, the apple pie, the straw...
    Smoked a rock, gotten high, and stood stolid
    in his quietness." ---- Some poet on poor-man's block.

    Had the Comeuppance King alternatively thought,
    "Peace combined is not some rubbish, but alternative
    resource for riches I will seek naught!" Pearing
    positively into the future, "Comeuppance quick and quiet..."

    And of course
    no tawdry drama-game played
    with my 1st-born.

    ------------------------
    ------------------------

    Well I did do about 15 minutes of researching Rumpelstiltskin on wikipedia... Interesting article that refreshed my memory: Rumpelstiltskin - Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia

    Tehehehe - My poem - a tiny bit of CRAZYness ((imagine that)) --- 2 questions --- In this poem am I for or against Rumplestiltskin? AND --- In this poem am I for or against the "Comeuppance" King? :p

    ALSO with my 3:00 AM silliness - thought to use the words 2 times :rolleyes:


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    hmm - don't know how I missed this post...
    Anyway - interesting write indeed MS N - Are you telling me that I'm some kind of deity or something :chuckle: LOL

    Good one though - So anyone gonna comment on mine:sun:
    I found my Muse for about 45 minutes or so....
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    Cinderella's Diary Page 44

    Lost my glass slipper
    for quick I had to run,
    to board before the Chariot
    turn to pumpkin and mice
    spell was done

    How could I imagine myself
    wrapped in such precious arms
    of a man, my evil step-sisters'
    tried to win, while longing
    for his quiet yet unbeknownst charms

    My Fairy Godmother said, "Rubbish!"
    to those of wicked woes
    no alternative at midnight
    yet I reminisce of my Prince
    and beautiful glass slippers on my toes

    How dare they; how could they
    treat me so torturous and cruel
    peace and love is all I long for
    I combine revenge with resources
    till I concoct one of their own witch's brew

    Bug eyes, prickly pear
    add scorpions and snails
    a dash of their perfume
    pinch of snake spice and
    a cup of cat-o-nine tails

    Positively would bring me joy
    to witness the evil one's wince
    to serve them this grand lunch
    as I pray the matching slipper finds me
    as I silently beckon my handsome Prince

    Please enjoy the meal, courtesy from me to you
    as I dream of a life with my Prince
    alas evil step-mother and sisters to
    for one by one will certainly die
    in the name of Cinderella comeuppance.

    alanmdouglas ALAN the JPiCan of Grumps Royalty

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    Dear Jacquii,

    Comment ? Comment ? OK - BRILLIANT !

    Tho there is one tiny quibble - the 2nd use of "pear" was "pearing" when I think you mean peEring - as in looking ?

    Actually a hugely fun poem with quite a serious bent.

    I say again -these 10 word challenges can take so many people in so many different directions, indeed, even a single person (you know who you are ! ) in so many directions, that I will be posting these here frequently !

    ALL of you, very well done.

    Love
    Alan
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    Yes, this is Brilliant Ms Jacquii-----> I also would say you are FOR Rump and NOT for the King.

    {{{{{~~~~***KIM***~~~}}}}}


    P.S. Funny, we both thought of Childhood stories, as mine is about Cinderella, posted above.

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