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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    1st - Thanx ALAN & KIM for commenting on my piece - I was kinda happy about the way it turned out. So glad you both likes... I may even post it in one of the poetry forums...
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    GIRL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I am seriously loving your Cinderella Diary! That is an AWESOME write MS KIM - I'm kinda surprised by the ending. I was thinking WTF - where did "Bug eyes, prickly pear - add scorpions and snails" come from - then read the last stanza = BRILLIANT

    Sometimes I wish I could have that type of mindset LOL - Nobody'd be fuckin' with MsJ then eh? :p

    Nice write girl - Original AND Novel idea!

    Jacquii.

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    3rdly and certainly not least... A Huge THANK YOU to GRUMPS for posting this challenge. 'Twas fun to say the least. It's always AWESOME to see the different styles that can be evoked with just 10 words! Nice share! Question: Where the hell is your challenge response??? :p

    Jacquii.
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    Ms Jacquii...I read your Masterpiece several times, and to quote you would mean quoting the entire poem. You did some very intricate filigree there that I cannot imagine even beginning to scribe. Guess that's why you are the Posey Goddess, and I am here to serve you......LOL!!!! Love Ya':p:D;)

    P.S. Yes, Thank you Alan for putting up such a challenge. I am pleased with my results, and twas quite the challenge, as was Ms Jacquii's #6. I feel more comfortable now about experimenting, and spreading my poetic wings. ;)


    {{{{~~~~***KIM***~~~~}}}}
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    **ahem, ahem** It's International Poetry Goddess :p
    ((mumbles to self "I really must get rid of this cold"))

    Jacquii.
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    Well, I was out all weekend, but...!

    Ahem! "International Poetry Goddess"!! Wow, when your muse comes back she comes back with a huge bang! and she boldly goes where no "man" has gone before...:orc: Rumpe's one of my favorite men...of all wiley little men with huge egos, that is!

    Ms. J, this is a super awesome write...takes the mind off on a fairytale trip but with hard twist on the modern connotations, for sure. You got game, lady...uh, sorry...that would be Your Highness, International Poetry Goddess!! I love the seedy roads this read takes a trip down...drags reality into the fanciful.

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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    LOL - suppose there's noone quite like I that drags reality so plentifully :p tehehehee - Thanx THERESE - I'm glad you like this piece - of course coming from yours truly - it's gotta be something a little off the wall LOL - I said to myself I Jacquii-fied it :chuckle:

    Thanx for your comment ;)

    Jacquii.

    alanmdouglas ALAN the JPiCan of Grumps Royalty

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    Hey, Jacquii :

    I hear ya, ya sez ya wants a reply ? OK, so here's ya reply, see's if ya really do wan it :

    GODFATHER’S OFFER

    Comeuppance, come tuppence
    I’ll give you an alternative,
    combined “peace” and quiet
    that all your positive resources
    would make mere pear-shaped rubbish;
    the quick will never find you ....


    Alan McAlpine Douglas

    Challenge words : comeuppance combine alternative
    peace quiet positive resource pear rubbish quick

    Love
    Alan
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Gotta love the last line especially GRUMPS:

    the quick will never find you ....


    I pride myself in my procrastination... Won't say anymore on that topic LOL
    But truly loving the simplicity of your piece - There's some knowledge there and a knowing, --- Perhaps an offer??? - Sounds nice to me!

    Anyway - Never one to mince words are we? ;)

    Nice share! I look forward to the next challenge - PLUS = I'll be able to notify Members via PM :yes: ----- Finally!

    ps - thanx for the poem

    alanmdouglas ALAN the JPiCan of Grumps Royalty

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    Dear Jacquii,

    An "offer" all right - one I cannot refuse - the "quick" as opposed to the "dead" ! I had thoughts of concrete foundations and of lime ....

    Love
    Alan

    alanmdouglas ALAN the JPiCan of Grumps Royalty

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    Dear Kim,

    So sorry, I think I missed yours cuz I was cross-posting, yes, what a vivid imagination, and showing the darker underbelly of that "innocent" beauty, Cinderella.

    Don't know if you want any crit, there are a few places where you might choose to make changes, but as a quick response, it is brilliant.

    I am so pleased that we have so many responses, and that one comment - about feeling more confident of ones trying new things, THAT is what it's all about. Not to mention handling a certain person' swriter's block !

    Love
    Alan
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    keylime pie and cement shoes?
    jealous fiends and concrete rocks at the bottom of the Atlantic, possibly some pieces in the Indian and an eyeball in the Arctic? :p

    Anyway - sounds intriguing, this offer of yours LOL

    [sign]Just jokes of course :no:[/sign]

    Jacquii.

    ps ALAN - I think Kim posted her Cinderella piece in the Miscellaneous section.

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    Nice writes, everyone! Great exercise, Alan! Here is my contribution to this challenge:

    Litterbugs!

    The night was tranquil, full of peace
    and they were quiet and quick.
    They came and dumped their rubbish
    and to see it, made me sick.

    Apple cores, slime and coffee grounds,
    broken pots that once held tea,
    plastic wrap and rotten pears
    they dumped in my lovely lea.

    But they shall get their comeuppance
    for I'm a resourceful soul.
    Combine that with stubborness,
    I don't quit when I've a goal.

    Donning gloves, I searched their trash,
    found a paper with their name.
    Told them they could clean it up,
    let them know it's not a game.

    I was quite positive they would,
    knowing the alternative.
    No one likes a hefty fine,
    or a dumpsite where they live.


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    alanmdouglas ALAN the JPiCan of Grumps Royalty

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    Dear Tree,

    Wow, another totally different take, on what seems to be a universal problem.

    You write this one as if you were a dainty English LADY, my dear, most restrained but very sure of yourself !

    Love
    Alan

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    TY Alan! No one has ever accused me of being lady-like before! How novel! LOL!


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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Ha! Biscotti and Tea with milk please :)
    J/K - I like this write TREE:

    Nice last stanza + anyone who can rhyme "alternative" with "where they live" deserves at least an honorable mention :p

    Nice write - Thanx for the sharing!

    Jacquii.

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    LOL @ MsJ! You have no idea how hard I wracked my poor brain for that rhyme!
    You and Alan are doing a marvelous job with these challenges - I love them!
    :jpicrocks:


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    I agree MS TREE - especially this challenge = Lots of fun & thoroughly enjoyable!
    :yayjpic:

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    The Old Man

    I quickly grabbed the pear off the cart
    from the old man's stand on 125th street.
    He sold fruits, drinks and all kinds of rubbish,
    but I still stopped there every day.
    Quiet as kept, I preferred his spot,
    an alternative resource to the places uptown,
    over priced and "uppities" looking down at me.
    This old man was honest; doing a positive thing and combined with hard work, was allowed to remain in peace.
    So while disarrayed at times, I'll spend my change here, rather than there.
    How's that for comeuppance?


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    alanmdouglas ALAN the JPiCan of Grumps Royalty

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    The "uppities" are proud of ya !

    My dear Sista,

    Excellent - tho you might want to make a double RR in disarrayed.

    You not only use the words well, but also weave a magic which makes me SEE the old fruit cart, but also chuck in a piece of humanity and philosophy as well. Awedome.

    Another one which confirms my love of 10-word challenges !

    Love
    Alan
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    Good job, guys...Tree I was looking for you to take out a shotgun and go find the address!! :sos:

    Nomad

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    :thanx2: Alan- also my spell checker ( I actually thought about that and 4got 2 go back, good lookin out). :hug: I am enjoying these, but U can't tell.Lol....................:girlwacko: :goofy:

    V3


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