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    Staring at His Feet
    By L. E. Evenston

    I stood there for the longest time,
    Just staring at his feet.
    His heels were raised the slightest bit—
    And never did we meet—
    But I knew what it really meant;
    Just staring at his feet.

    I hadn’t spoke a single word
    While staring at his feet,
    But listened to his slow breathing
    And heard his heart’s true beat.
    Still I knew what it really meant
    While staring at his feet.

    His name was None but I still knew,
    While staring at his feet,
    His soul was strong, his voice was kind
    And never I felt heat.
    Still I knew what it really meant;
    Just staring at his feet.

    I stood there for the longest time,
    Just staring at his feet,
    Still I knew what it really meant
    While staring at his feet.



    I'm not even going to try to explain this to you, as none of you would get it.. it goes with a romance story I am working on which has this weird sub plot of feet and body language.

    So yeah.. I guess I did explain it.

    Enjoy!

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    What a beautiful villanelle!
    This can be a tough form to do, but you did an excellent job on it!
    I can see the body language thing happening here.
    :goodpost:
    -Tree.


    Posted By Altree94 | Apr 5, 2007
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    It is wonderful to
    meet somebody and... not.

    To feel their thoughts
    and wonderings...

    yet not touch.

    To...

    yes connect at...

    a distance and...

    not.

    Thaks for the
    read.


    Posted By Jeez | Apr 6, 2007
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    Super thanks to all of you for reading! ^.^

    Tree: I already replied to you... in the chat.. so there. ^.^

    Jeez: Wow.. you got exactly what I was saying in there. I love you now. *hugs!*

    Kim: If you want to do some sketches, you might want to sit and listen to my full and detailed symbolic explinations to it all. :p

    Thank you all for reading! You're all super cool!

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