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    Sally Roberts Forestdawn

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    On the days that you forget me
    If what they say is true,
    That when it steals your memories
    I'll still be loving you.

    If what they say is true
    You'll not perceive the strange,
    I'll still be loving you
    No matter what the change.

    You'll not perceive the strange
    When I've faded from your mind,
    No matter what the change
    When you leave your world behind.

    When I've faded from your mind
    In Alzheimers deadly grasp,
    When you leave your world behind
    My love remains steadfast.

    In Alzheimers deadly grasp
    That when it steals your memories
    My love remains steadfast
    On the days that you forget me.

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    great job on the pantoum...it hits home...i recently lost a great aunt and she was suffering badly from it...very touching and nicely done...i'm sure she appreciates it...thanks for sharing.


    Posted By Checkmate | Jun 28, 2007
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    Sally Roberts Forestdawn

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    Thank you for your comments Checkmate:

    It had taken me several months to finish this poem, every time I tried working on it I would burst into tears. I was finally able to put it all together, without falling apart at the seems.

    Your comment was greatly appreciated. I knew there would be other readers who can relate with this poem, and I wanted to share it.

    Thanks again
    Blessings

    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    tragic poem here so well written
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    Dear Sally,

    Yes, alot of us can relate. This was beautifully executed, and I am so sorry. I believe also choosing the pantoum was a perfect choice to lay down that pain with. The title could not be more fitting. Thank you Sally for sharing this poem.

    Kim

    Sally Roberts Forestdawn

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    Thanks Erik:

    Your comments make me smile, even when it's a sad and surreal poem. You alwaus come trough with kindess.

    Kim: I felt that this type of poetry was a perfect way of saying what needed to be said. It brings out the emotion within it several times and melts the hearts of the readers.
    Thank you for your comment.


    Blessings

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