Welcome to JPiC Forum For Writers! Please log in or sign up to interact with our Community.
  1. Welcome!

    Hello Guest | Welcome To Jacquii's Poetry in Color Forum


    JPiC Forum for Writers is an online community exclusively dedicated to the share of poetry and writing. As a continuing work-in-progress, our poetry forums host a melange of writing with new additions being posted daily. We encourage you to right now and come join us in our celebration of diversity with the typed word!


  1. Cool

    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

    Member Since:
    Nov 14, 2006
    Message Count:
    1,980
    Trophy Points:
    53
    Location:
    Claremont, CA
    Books:
    0
    Ratings Received:
    +14 / 0 / -0


    The sunrise comes in quiet wonder
    Marching forth in glamour and splendor
    Brightening, glistening, coloring all
    Soft silver strokes at first do fall
    Then golden wings spread wide and far

    They cover the earth by half in blue
    Promising hope for those, many and few
    Who strive each day to overcome the strain
    Of living in life’s too fast-paced lane

    Each day, each morning that shivers in glee
    May be the one that makes your troubles flee
    Or imbue you with the courage you need
    To vanquish the world of all bad deeds
    And put an end your on-going fight
    With the never-ending terrors of the night

    The day dawns clear while the blackbirds sing
    Celebrating their triumph over the worms
    They have neither a care nor are forlorn
    But merely put their heads under their wing
    When each night falls and they’re fat and full
    With drinking from life’s wealthy spring

    Oh, for a mindless carefree day
    Spinning on a beach, in the water at play
    Floating, paddling, treading the sparkling sea
    Like children wondering about nothing at all
    What would you not give for such a ball
    Where you’re not required to be strong
    But can be just a blackbird moseying along
    The telephone wire, enjoying the breeze
    Looking down, keeping your balance with ease

    Though we will never this carefree be
    We get a moment, or maybe two or three
    Where we look around at the greatness of life
    And wonder why we never take the time
    To breathe deeply from the fountain of truth
    Which can keep us forever in our youth
    We have but to love each other and try
    Never to ask how, when or why
    Goodness comes into all our daily lives
    Just accept it and pass it along each time
    The same way you would a penny or a dime

    © therese young

    Echoes Poetic Princess

    Member Since:
    Nov 7, 2006
    Message Count:
    237
    Trophy Points:
    0
    Location:
    Ohio
    Books:
    0
    Ratings Received:
    +0 / 0 / -0
    well-crafted write, solid images, strong passages throughout:wavey:


    Posted By Echoes | Nov 15, 2006
    #2

    lanaia74 New Member

    Member Since:
    Oct 20, 2006
    Message Count:
    206
    Trophy Points:
    0
    Books:
    0
    Ratings Received:
    +0 / 0 / -0
    Totally AWESOME!


    Posted By lanaia74 | Nov 15, 2006
    #3
  2. Depressed

    butchiesmom JPiC Premium VIP Member

    Member Since:
    Oct 20, 2006
    Message Count:
    679
    Trophy Points:
    33
    Location:
    In a trailer, on a hill.
    Home page:
    Books:
    0
    Ratings Received:
    +37 / 0 / -0
    Though I thought the entire poem excellent, fantastic and generally schwell (my dad's word, lol) I thought these two lines especially descriptive.

    each morning that shivers in glee
    Like children wondering about nothing at all

    I like that I found nothing to distract me from this imaginative poem. The imagery is vivid and the entire poem reads smoothly.

    Fantastic write, Therese
    Gail
  3. Cool

    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

    Member Since:
    Nov 14, 2006
    Message Count:
    1,980
    Trophy Points:
    53
    Location:
    Claremont, CA
    Books:
    0
    Ratings Received:
    +14 / 0 / -0
    Thanks so much Lisa (luv ur vid!:) lanaia74, and Gail. I appreciate the comments, guys!! Cool new word, Gail! :wineglass:
    Therese

We hope you're enjoying our forum!

Only registered Members have access to posting priviledges. Registration here is 100% FREE. Use the button below to begin registration or the form on the right to login to your account.

Forgot your password?

Share This Page