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Discussion in 'Creative Traditional' started by Morning Star, Mar 5, 2012.



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    The mist clears
    to make way for the morning's sun
    whose rays even now begin to reach for the horizon
    —where it will be seated for a time
    before it makes its ascent into the skies.

    May flowers will dance
    before the luminescent light,
    bobbing and weaving in their playfulness
    of the late spring breeze
    that makes its way over hilltops
    and stirs the newly-born leaves.

    Blue birds nestle on rooftops
    and watch the starling's aerial display,
    and wonder at their own flight,
    that they might take,
    when their younglings are fully grown
    and no longer need their support.

    The summer breeze
    may bring other startling wonders,
    with a playfulness of its own
    —albeit in the headiness of the summer's warmth,
    when even the rose looks to the relief
    that dusk's respite affords.

    Meanwhile,
    tulips and daisies enjoy the days of warmth
    mixed with coolness,
    at a time when the daffodils remain vital
    in their sunshine yellow.

    On this day, the birds busy themselves
    with hummingbirds alike
    —whose wavering dance reminds us
    to play and create the sacred space
    for a dance of our own.


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    Morning Star

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    I believe I will grab a cup of coffee and wait for the morning. Thank you for the read


    Posted By tham | Mar 20, 2012
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    Thank you Tham.
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Another lovely write Morning Star. This is such a tranquil piece - reminds me of being in the country: a serene dreamscape.

    Thanks for the share.

    J.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Mar 23, 2012
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    Thanks Jacquii

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    Hello there, Morning Star;
    I thoroughly enjoyed reading your idyllic work that contains many pleasing lines, but because I am active in wildbird rehabilitation, "Blue birds" and "younglings" stood out for me. Please see below. Very enjoyable, indeed. Thanks for posting.
    Jerry


    Blue birds nestle on rooftops (bluebirds)
    and watch the starling's aerial display,
    and wonder at their own flight,
    that they might take,
    when their younglings are fully grown (probably fledglings ready to fly?)
    and no longer need their support.


    Posted By JerryK | Mar 26, 2012
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    Thanks Jerry.

    That's very helpful!!

    I am just about to submit those poems somewhere, so the correction is VERY helpful and timely!!!

    Thanks for your compliments also.

    Regards
    Morning Star

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    You are quite welcome, Morning Star;
    Much luck with your submission. :thumbsup:
    Take care,
    JerryK.


    Posted By JerryK | Mar 26, 2012
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