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    I interrupted the night fall,
    With two socks set on a stool,
    Two bare feet on tall grass,
    Toes moving back and forth,
    Back and forth.

    No longer feeling so tall,
    Two elbows fell on the pavement so cool,
    My hands stroking the grey mass,
    Fingers moving back and forth,
    Back and forth.

    By a wind I rose to stand next to a wall,
    My hands dropped on the stool,
    My feet walked on the grass,
    Heels moving only forth,
    Only forth.

    Into the clouds, not at all,
    But instead I flew over them, my fingers feelings the soft wool,
    My feet felt tickled by the blue-white mass,
    Not looking back or forth,
    Back or forth.

    With only one wing I flew across a broken sky,
    The another only as a protector.


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    Hia!

    This one touches me do as do all your poems. Feelings swiflty moving up and down, uncertainty and no one really to protect or at least able to creat a feeling of being protected.

    I am yet still to comprehend it completely and perhaps you could shed some light over it?

    Åströmmer


    Posted By Åströmmer | Jan 2, 2008
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    I don't think there's anything to enlighten. It'll come to you. Thanks for the comment.


    Posted By ¤Me¤ | Jan 2, 2008
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    WOW.
    your poems, as always, are so smooth, so flawless.

    it is beautiful. truly beautiful asymmetrical repetition.

    i loved it.
    all i can say is WOW.

    so peaceful, so beautiful...yet...there is something else. :wub:

    fav poem!

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    Hehe, thanks mango. Haven't heard from you in a while, you seem to be online in msn sometimes and yet you're never 'there' :p Must be somewhat hard to speak through two instant messengers. :p


    Posted By ¤Me¤ | Jan 4, 2008
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    mangodroplet Blue Mango Puppy :]

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    lol, no, i'm not ignoring you....it's actually that my comp is on, but i'm not there.
    tehe.

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    I thought that might be it :p


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