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    Tanka is good. You love tha Tanka.
    This one has no name.



    When at last I stop
    I hear her,
    Tickling that guitar.
    I have to wet my lips for a smile.
    ‘Cause it’s been a while.


    Copyright © 2006 - Applejous, Perth WA

    :heart: J


    Posted By Applejous | Jul 11, 2006
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    Matto The Monk Bought Lunch!

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    First thing I though of when I saw the title was Derka Derka Derka... Too much team america for me :D

    I love this one, always have. Makes me want to see her, to hear her...


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    Applejous New Member

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    hey yeah!

    heheh it does sound like that team america thing lol

    yeah well hopefully, when you close your eyes, you can (hehe lame, but you know :fruit: )

    :heart: J

    ps - that dancing thing is killing me!.....no, really, i fear it may


    Posted By Applejous | Jul 11, 2006
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    Matto The Monk Bought Lunch!

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    No need to worry, Ill do something magical and it will attack me instead of you :):moon:


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    PaintedDiary JPiC Mentor

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    Such sweet imagery in such a small space. I LOVE IT!!! So Tanka!!!!!!:declare:

    Much Luv'...~*Painted Diary*~
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Ah yes - The tanka - 2nd or 3rd cousin to the haiku...

    Very nice APPLEJOUS - Descriptive lust-love resides in this poem... Infatuation perhaps? At anyrate thanx for sharing it - beautiful piece!

    ALSO welcome to the JPiC Community - If you haven't done so already - Feel free to introduce yourself via the Member Introductions forum.

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Jul 11, 2006
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    FaShaBaby Rhapsodist Pinay

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    I thought this was such a cool little piece of Tanka. The tone was very playful and fun.

    "I have to wet my lips for a smile."

    I like that line there.


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    tight-

    applejoes- enjoyed this here immensly artist. a nice end- rhyme chime yeah.

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