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Discussion in 'Spoken Word & Freestyle' started by Jeez, Dec 1, 2006.



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    Posted By Jeez | Dec 1, 2006
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    This is so sad, Jeez! Pleasure without joy is NO satisfaction at all! As for technical aspects - just a couple of spelling errors.
    hear - here.
    your - you're
    happyness - happiness.
    Still a very unique write and I am glad that I did not miss it! TY for posting!


    Posted By Altree94 | Dec 1, 2006
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    I think it's most likely the little imperfections that make this piece so REAL... Anyway - sad poem no doubt... Seems there's been a lot of that around my place in particular & just recently - but oh-well

    We roll with the punches and if rollings no good - not to proud to fall LOL - AND gaining any type of "pleasure" at'all is joy enough.

    At anyrate - thanx for sharing your poem JEEZ :)

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Dec 1, 2006
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    Dear Jeez,

    A very poignant piece, that draws us in. I do hope that hand you long for appears and extends to clasp your teardrops. As I have stated before, your poetry is something to behold, as is the most unique. Thank you for sharing.

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    Triggers emotion

    Emotional lines, Jeez...the sadness is felt. When a writer can trigger emotion and convey it to the readers, the poem has done its job in communicating feelings intended by the author...be well, Jeez...Blessed Be...

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    Posted By Jeez | Dec 2, 2006
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