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    The blues
    a word
    so very smooth
    floating through your world like cumulous clouds
    soft and flowing off the tongue like honey.

    A state not sought after by many
    representing cracked hearts and shattered dreams
    displaced trust and diverging paths
    elusively hiding in betrayed byways
    fogged senses cover the pain
    clarity lost
    clarity gained.

    Straining singers seeking solace
    in self-serving songs of woe
    inevitably
    deceived by time
    an un-alluring state
    in love restraints
    emotions grate like screeching chalk
    lying raw and hungry
    waiting
    for the next fix
    of love.

    A time entwined
    with glorious dismay
    many shoulders offered
    to while away the long lonely days
    the heart's quiet fury
    moaning still
    while the blue's fever
    rages
    easing the hours
    with Etta James
    soothing the pain away
    righteously angry
    saving tears
    for another day

    nomadicrhymer

    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    the first stanza was very well done,
    I think it said some very important things,

    The blues is a great subject,
    and you diseected it so throughly
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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Thanks, Erik...I wrote this in a Blue mood...glad it's gone! hehe...:dance:

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    yw glad the blues didn't last long for ya, good things can come out of it sometimes though

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    I am in awe of artists who have the ability to cry out their feelings as do the Blues artists can. I always feel they have some insight into my own heart and head when I listen to them...and I do quite frequently. You work here is a great echo of how they express it. You did a very good job, Fruit Puppy.


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    Ha ha! Benny...I think Fruit Puppy was for little Ms. Mango? you getting confused, or was she on your mind? :roflmao:

    Anyway...thanks for reading and commenting...yes! I love, love Etta James...my very favorite Blues Lady she is....makes me feel like MY heart is the one being torn out when I listen to her...but u gotta be in the mood!!

    thanks again, Benny!

    Nomad

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