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Discussion in 'Spoken Word & Freestyle' started by Benny, Jan 14, 2007.



    Benny New Member

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    Displayed for public viewing
    after a private one has ended,
    laying still and final-
    save well meaning words
    from friends and sometimes family-
    awaiting burial or resurrection,
    the body produces memories
    of warmth or icy cold;

    Often there may flow tears
    left unashamed upon faces,
    or subtle revelation-
    causing some to seek
    shelter's warm calming embrace-
    wherein life is imitated and bared,
    left to our own interpretation
    of the posted poem.


    Posted By Benny | Jan 14, 2007
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    Wow, Benny! Superb write of the darkness!:wave: :chuckle2: :argue:


    Posted By lanaia74 | Jan 14, 2007
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    Benny New Member

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    Ummm...dark? Yes, it could be. The poem is about finally finishing your poem and placing it out for all to see and discuss and the emotions each reader can take from the words...lol. I appreciate your turn on this work. Thanks, lanaia!


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    Dear Benny,

    :wow: This was a different feel here. Wonderful selection of words to describe the journey of a poem so to speak. It is amazing that even with writing a poem like this, still makes our minds meander into different tributaries. Many thoughts ran through my mind even before reading, and based on the title alone!!! Writing is such a beautiful craft. Within this piece, I related very well, with the feeling of the different emotions from your audience. Some may feel this way, and some may feel, that way. The biggest fear for me is just simply "putting it out there". lol Great, thought provoking poem!!!! :bravo: Loved it!!! Take Care.

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    Nice write Benny! It seems that a lot of us have that fear of just "putting it out there". That fear is usually followed by the question: "Have I just made a fool of myself, again?". Oh well, at least for me, if I have, it is not the first time and most likely will not be the last!


    Posted By Altree94 | Jan 14, 2007
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