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    lanaia74 New Member

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    I want nothing to do with this evil thing
    But it is a part of life
    His cloak he holds near so he won't feel the sting
    He is about to give, sharp as a knife.

    His cloak is his disguise
    So he can't feel the emotions he rips apart
    He is always there for you when you die
    Picking up the pieces to add to his deathly cart.

    He really seems happy in his awful work
    Using his cloak to hide
    Watch out! He always lurks
    Waiting to tear down someone's pride.

    The grim reaper as we know him
    Making each of us miserable at times
    He don't care if he goes out on a limb
    He has no feelings, this awful thing hits us on a whim.

    The cloak of death such a cruel thing
    But what can we do?
    There is a time in life, his awful song we shall all sing
    And his cloak he holds near never having any fears.


    Posted By lanaia74 | Oct 26, 2006
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    MetricalSonneteer In mind to beat Petrarch!

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    I like the deal of the death-angel lurking everywhere with sadistic approaches. Utilise this poem's potential, and not just this one - every poem's potential... :) It's a long and hard process, but that's true of every great poet of the past.

    Hope this helps,
    Jonny
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Hi LANAIA - I too am not much of a rhyming poem fan until recently... The Poetry-Defined section has really opened my eyes to the beauty of rhyming poems.

    I love the gist of this poem and it's meaning. The depth of your poem is such that the testimony cannot be denied. I too know of the entity who creeps in cloak of death. Would I be happy to call him my friend? Not after reading your poem LOL

    Nice write - Thanx for sharing it with us!

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Oct 27, 2006
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    Benny New Member

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    wonderful words...very visual...


    Posted By Benny | Oct 29, 2006
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