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    Polish your eyes
    something delicate
    that sing me
    green lies.

    Dress yourself
    something eligant
    and whisper
    kind obscenities
    in my ear.

    Cut my lung
    with the fiber glass
    of that second hand
    sorta lovin.

    Envelope me
    in the blue moon
    sort of romance
    that shoots
    down the dove.

    Give my God
    complex a shock
    to the chest,
    stop its heart
    from a beating,
    just beating
    itself with
    the dead doves
    last feather.

    Give me that
    "tsk tsk" kinda
    motion behind
    a sea of
    brown hair.

    Let the void
    of it all just
    fill with the vain
    bounce of
    your most casual
    step.

    Sit alone
    on the shore
    surrounded by the
    group begging
    for a song,
    just begging for
    some music.

    Don't let me sit
    alone,
    the sand's too
    busy looking
    quick and sucking
    me down.

    Taking this drag
    from life,
    maybe I'll be a
    nice release for
    it all.

    It's all about
    not knowing the
    answer,
    of whether or not
    I'll be exhaled
    as a pure white
    or tainted black
    smoke.

    Either way,
    I'll be ashed
    the same way.

    Into a tray
    that will only
    blow me through
    the wind,
    uncapable
    unable
    to hold me for
    too long.

    Just carry me
    home on that
    slight kind of
    breeze.

    The welcomed kind
    on a summer evening.

    Still though;
    you'll brush me off
    your tight jeans
    the same.

    Thats the
    denim noose
    baby,
    the kind that wont
    snap my neck.

    I hang myself,
    only to flail my legs
    in show,
    before my soul
    breaks through.

    May my requiem
    be something
    no one cares to
    remember.


    Posted By MDMH89 | Jun 15, 2007
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    Jer4clarity Lover of Meanings

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    Matt,

    Each stanza requires intense observation to get a grip on what you are saying. Part of me thinks this poem is about personification of a cigarette. :reefer:

    My Fav:

    Jerry

    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    theres many wishes in here most sinister sinister from broken desire,
    theers some women that will never no matter what treat you badly
    denim noose a strange cool concept,

    great verses I'm tempted to 5 star it but i'll wait for one a tad better,
    it'lll probably get 5 starred anyways,

    but gripping flowing, mind-numbingly sinister poem which turns out rationally heart-broken,
    almost madee me forget soem of those line in the beginning but i oculdn't they make up most of the poem

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    Yes it is deep and requires concentration

    Taking this drag
    from life,
    maybe I'll be a
    nice release for
    it all.

    It's all about
    not knowing the
    answer,
    of whether or not
    I'll be exhaled
    as a pure white
    or tainted black
    smoke.


    very good breath deep!


    Posted By Kit Carson | Jun 15, 2007
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