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    TheBlackPoet New Member

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    Man:
    Woman, you ignite me.
    You set my spirit ablaze
    Watch as I light the world with your gift that’ll burn for endless days

    This flame is of a smokeless flicker dancing on multi-dimensional planes
    Dancing through times and eons and ages and centuries and millennia
    As you and I move through time, we displace cosmic winds
    That rotates solar systems and galaxies and universes
    As if they were nothing but summer breezes passing through our open hands
    Who is greater than the Black Woman and Man?

    You are such that it would take an eternity to define your beauty alone
    So much time that man will have died and his body decayed to bone
    You are that beautiful, yea, even more; you are exquisitely, perfect

    As the season of man closes upon him
    We watch from a distant Diaspora, his last chapter
    And as he approaches his apocalyptic end
    We know that we will remain to see yet another book in time begin
    It is we who will write wisdom for them
    While they aspire to transgress again
    Who is greater than the Black Woman and Man?

    We shall always remain; our energy force indestructible
    Unsusceptible to time and element
    We are the circle that encompasses all things
    We circumambulate the finite imagination of men
    And give to them those fleeting instruments of their own demise
    It is we who hear their false supplication to the skies
    Who is greater than the Black Woman and Man?

    Woman:
    Man, you create me.
    You mold me into a form of being that cannot be contained
    You are my source, my stone, my water, I cannot abstain.
    I will travel across all of time in search of you
    And until I find you, I will abstain…
    Because none is as worthy as you…
    There is no King, but the Black Man

    We transcend all love and worldly adoration
    On this plane, we are one in spirit
    You breathe; and I exhale
    You look; and I see
    You listen; and I hear
    You touch; and I feel
    You eat; and I taste
    You create me, therefore I am…
    Who is greater than this, my Black Man?

    Speak into existence a universe
    And bear witness as I give birth to moons and suns
    Lighting the skies with stars
    That your seed might travel the righteous course
    Call them to you and they shall respond
    Who is greater than this Divine Black Force?

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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    :wow: TBP --- This poem reads well, like a biblical passage of sorts... Biblical, as the voice seems at once prophetic and apocryphal... The tone has sensual newage philosophical undertones - but an antique feel to it, especially

    Again - sounds like the Original The Last Poets - Like an unknown knowledge you espouse - quite puzzling actually to see such strong-voiced words on paper...

    This passage is really puzzling... Makes me ask the question "What happens to the rest of us if you write the wisdom of ages?" Not that that would be an entirely bad thing - but again - this poem of Divine Love is mystical in its essense. A spoken word mystery of sorts.

    All-in-all a very intriguing poem. Thoroughly enjoyable read.
    I wonder though - where the inspiration from your words comes from.
    Is this a spiritual poem as well? If yes - what is your spiritual affiliation?

    At anyrate - Great share - Thanx for the read ;)

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Sep 4, 2007
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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Well, I got halfway through this at 1:00AM and decided to retreat and attack with more gusto this morning....not "attack" in it's original intentioned meaning, of course, but it was so intriguing that I wanted to be fresh when attempting to decipher it.

    Dancing through times and eons and ages and centuries and millennia
    As you and I move through time, we displace cosmic winds

    We shall always remain; our energy force indestructible
    Unsusceptible to time and element
    We are the circle that encompasses all things


    This paints such a clear picture of larger than life "gods" if you will, moving through the cosmic realm at will, as if through an ocean miles deep, displacing all in their path and forging new ones from the displacement itself. All powerful forces, two halves of a whole...coming together to decide the destiny of mankind...

    Well to say the least, it's a setting that moves me, who has always been fascinated with Greek mythology - these two lines below personify the very arrogance of the "gods" who were purported to be as selfish as toddlers and had temper tantrums to go with it...Zeus, or Odin (Norse ruler of gods) etc, etc....take your pick...I can see these words pouring out of their mouths:

    And give to them those fleeting instruments of their own demise
    It is we who hear their false supplication to the skies


    ...and to the question of who is greater - I say the original Creator...as outlined by your very words below, who DID...

    Speak into existence a universe
    And bear witness as I give birth to moons and suns
    Lighting the skies with stars


    Anyway...that's just what I took away from this very grand panorama of poetry...absolutely brilliant write!!

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    This is a powerful and stunning poem.
    I would have to agree that it does read
    kinda biblical. You have a strong voice here
    and I enjoyed even though I am not black.
    Great write!


    Posted By Moonchild | Sep 5, 2007
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