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    Terence Member

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    He stood atop the mountain, high;
    the world lay at his feet.
    But little did he know this track
    would be the one to beat
    … the downhill skier

    For years he’d tried, and finally,
    he’d made it to the top;
    his life was always full-ahead,
    nobody dared to stop
    … the downhill skier

    He started down the slope with speed
    and then began to blow,
    for he was getting out of breath.
    There was no way to slow
    … the downhill skier

    Snow dust was flying everywhere;
    it all went up his nose.
    His friends called out for him to quit
    but no one could oppose
    … the downhill skier

    He kept along the two white lines,
    and he made good headway,
    until an avalanche came down
    and quickly swept away
    … the downhill skier

    He lay cold on his table top;
    a glint was in one eye
    as if he finally had found
    a trip to satisfy
    … the downhill skier


    Posted By Terence | Jan 28, 2008
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    JolieH JPiC Contributor

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    LOL,
    That was a rotten trip - love these narrative poems, great description and action.


    Posted By JolieH | Jan 30, 2008
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    Terence Member

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    Thanks for your comments Jolie. It was certainly a rotten 'trip'. From your response, I'm not sure if you got the full gist but I'll take it that you did.

    Thanks, Terence


    Posted By Terence | Jan 31, 2008
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    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    Wonderful story in this and well told.
    Good rhyming and rhythm and meter.
    This was really well written. I very
    much enjoyed, thanks!


    Posted By Moonchild | Feb 5, 2008
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