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    Curtis Spider Lee Curtis Spider Lee

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    the emptyness.....
    echoes throughtout my mind.
    Reminding me of nothing but the loneliness.
    Leaving me breathless and gasping for air.
    Searching for hope finding none there.
    Like reciprocating circles-
    they go on like echoes.
    It all remains so endless, amongst this...emptyness.
    Yet is as much fun as watching a circus of lonely clowns-
    searching for more of nothing.

    deep_poet86 Endless Rewind

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    I feel a very personal touch added to this poem when I read it. It wraps around my heart reminding me of what I have gone through in the past. The emotion feels strong yet depressed. But that is what makes this poem beautiful and enjoyable. Good work.


    Posted By deep_poet86 | Feb 5, 2008
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    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    Strong emotion and very well expressed.
    I can relate to this. I really enjoyed.
    Great write!


    Posted By Moonchild | Feb 5, 2008
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    Curtis Spider Lee Curtis Spider Lee

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    Thanks again Lee Ann! I suppose it good to feel alittle human sometimes:whistle3:!

    Curtis Spider Lee Curtis Spider Lee

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    Thanks MoonChild! I feel blessed to be able to write this work and that you could enjoy it!

    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    hey Curtis, this poem was great,
    the imagery was so surreal and well done,
    you made this poem a great read

    Curtis Spider Lee Curtis Spider Lee

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    Hey Man... whatz-up?! Thanks for reading and i'm glade you enjoyed this write!
    By the way, thanks for the shout-out... yeah I made the century mark finally and it feels great! Thanks again sir and I will look for ya out here in the JPIC!:friends:

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    cool keep up the posting Curtis,

    one thing your title in the main section is spelled emtyness instead of emptyness,
    I'd fix it before you send it to publishers or just for here it should be fixed,

    Curtis Spider Lee Curtis Spider Lee

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    Thanks Eric for noticing my biennial foul-up! Na, actually it happens all the time with me! However in this case, I did notice and liked the way this word (not really a word) looked only in the "Title." So instead of the word"emptyness" I wanted the title to look and feel without something "(emty) ness." (i'm just twisted like that!)

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    okay cool Curtis

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