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    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    wherein visages of ice
    no longer point jagged,
    and the cold snow finally lets go of my
    precious flower, ragged,

    coldly and warmly are two things that exist,
    between Winter and Spring,
    the snow needs to melt,
    the sun gives its soft kiss,

    When the snow lets go and covers a Robins breast,
    and builds its tomb,
    unholy, icy nest,

    be gone thou villain seed,
    let Freya intervene,
    you are the one in heath,
    this tragedy impede,
    uncover my flower so I can love this Spring,

    does do their dostile chattering,
    I don't know but fall foe,
    to a late Spring,

    for God knows no amount of torture,
    lest he turn my fragrant flower into a weed,

    the first thaw had begun away snow,
    away snow,
    let me and my flower have each others peace.

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    Sealiah Poetic Dancer

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    WOW!!! :heat:
    This is beautiful Erik... a vast change from your regular pace and style, and I love it. I love the imagery, the feeling of longing. This is absolutely stunning, it really is. I applaud you.


    Posted By Sealiah | Mar 28, 2007
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    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    thanks Sealiah,

    I did put allot of effort into making it Keatsy,
    but maybe I made it Eriksy as well lol

    I'm so glad you like it

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    GREAT READ, Erik!!!!!! Indeed, Keatsy...but, I found a great deal of Erik all over it. I love this work...very beautiful read...very.


    Posted By Benny | Mar 31, 2007
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    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    thanks allot Benny
    yeah its a good combination then
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    Dear Erik,

    :wow: Indeed. How beautiful and delicate. This is like soft whispers, like soft prayers. There is allot of your style in this with a twist. It has an Old English nomenclature feel that heightens the images and voice in this piece. It is quite exquisite Erik, and I read this several times. Each time, I captured a new image, a new breath. Thank you for sharing this with us.

    {{{~~**KIM**~~}}};)

    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    thanks Kim

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    Nice poetic ride.
    First of all I love
    snow and this poem
    shows the feel of
    snow on a winter
    day. Wonderful
    writing...
    Flows good too.

    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    same here thanks misty,

    yes I tried to make it flow well,

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