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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    OK - so one of the writing groups I belong to had an interesting writing challenge - The challenge was to write a 20 line poem or memoir about a tree... So the 1st thing that came to mind (NATURALLY :p) was the crazy JPiC Christmas Tree we "decorated" Christmas Holiday 2006... Anyway - I was inspired so.... Enjoy. It's a haiku/alexandrine couplet melange LOL



    The Freedom Promise

    diverse in blossom
    the pine stands as reminder
    indigenous life

    that the world shall see our tree standing without strife
    hope blooming amidst ornamented memory

    angel's reverie;
    flakes, icesickle, mistletoe
    and our smiles are wide

    from around the globe we've decorated with pride
    friendship in our souls; that we would earthly inspire

    such want never tired,
    for the root of our tree: strong
    in the midst of sharing

    and such delicate placing, each jewel of caring
    so the year next will bring the most ultimate joy

    deserved of coy
    euphemisms in grace:
    personified love

    our tree of life sanctioned by unity's tight glove.
    Holding steady are we, to the freedom promise.

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    THE TREE (ROFL)


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Jun 29, 2007
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    This is very nice! The images jump right out of the writing! Wonderful! Thanks!

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    YES!!!! YES!!!! YES!!!!

    MsJacquii. You have honored us with the surreality of the holiday season. A magnificant contribute of an artist's view of the blessed icon that will always remain an evergreen.

    Thank you very much a masterpiece for sure.

    Blessings
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    Dear Ms Jacquii,

    :wow: To think that you may not have posted this. :wow: such inspiration. You just have poetry flowing in your plasma, and just waiting to burst don't you? This was a bit of seriousness girl. The message loud and clear. That first line after that title was an awesome "hook". Set the tone, and one cannot sway from it till done. Thank you for sharing this with us Ms Jacquii.

    Kimberly;)

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    That's quite a form, Jacquii, and an uplifting poem for the season.

    such want never tired,
    for the root of our tree: strong
    in the midst of sharing

    Those words are so true, whether spiritual or familial. Oh that those feelings were true for all people, all the time.

    Thanks for posting.


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    Ms J,

    This poem has well placed words, wonderful meter and verse. Each line is striking.. My fav:

    to me this was the picture of those around the tree!

    Jerry
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Thanx DEBORAH - this was a fun poem to write actually
    I'm glad you like!

    Ah Shux! Thanx so much SALLY - I remember decorating that tree and it was such a thrill - then when WOSIB Lit challenge was to write about a tree - It was the first image that came to mind! Thanx for your comments and I'm glad you enjoyed the poem ;)

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Jun 30, 2007
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    hmmmm - I wasn't gonna post it - but I'm glad I did!
    Thanx KIM for your comments - I do believe I found my muse for a few minutes while penning this poetry lol - Glad you enjoyed it!

    I hear ya TERENCE - That's mainly the top reason I wanted to write about that crazy Christmas tree, thinking that writing such an uplifting poem would inspire people to freedom! Thanx very much for your comments ;)

    Thanx you very much JER for commenting! That's one thing I wanted to accomplish - for each stanza to have an independent meaning that when put together is picturesque and unique in its own right - One reason I chose to write using the haiku and alexandrine couplet format.


    I'm so happy I post this poem, as YAWL's comments have made my evening!
    I'm so glad you all enjoyed!

    Jacquii.:sun:


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Jul 1, 2007
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