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    This game is a writing challenge of another form of oriental writing similar to the haiku, yet called "Hokku".
    The scheme is still 5 -7 -5, however, the content is for one to go beyond poetic words and paint a picture based on feelings.

    One of our very own JPiCans, Benny, captured the essence of the “Hokku” in a reply to one of his poems, and caught my eye!!! Thank you Benny for allowing me to quote you!!

    I remember as a small boy standing under that tree with my Grandfather many times. I was young, but even then I understood something special was taking place for him. His steel blue eyes would freeze as he stared at things I could not see.


    That is what the writing is about, and Benny's words described this writing style beautifully, and should provide members with a sense of what it is.

    Do you remember "running through the sprinkler" as a child on a hot summer's day? Or the warm taste of a fresh-baked loaf just taken from the oven in December? Perhaps the smell of the dry leaves in the pale golden light of an autumn morning? Have you seen the mist rising from a river on a spring morning? All of these are hokku experiences--they are experiences of the senses occurring at a certain point in the season of the year, and there are many, many more that you will not only recall but will experience with each new day.

    Hokku is quite simply the art of putting these seasonal sensory experiences into as few words as are necessary to clearly convey the experience without either confusing the reader with too few words or obscuring the experience with too many.
    To write hokku one must keep the self out of the way so that nature may speak directly. Hokku is the experience itself, before thought adds all kinds of things to it--thoughts and frills and commentary.
    Unlike contemporary haiku, which is heavily influenced by Western poetry and concepts, hokku uses ordinary English punctuation to guide the reader gently through the brief three lines. It also avoids topics that tend to disturb or trouble the mind.

    In Japan, where it originated, there were many fine writers of hokku--Onitsura, Basho, Gyodai and others. And though hokku has gone far beyond its origins in Japan, it nonetheless keeps the same spiritual basis of poverty, simplicity, selflessness and transience, though it is written now in ordinary, everyday English.

    In learning hokku, it is best not to think of it as poetry. Instead think of it as an experience of the senses happening in a particular seasonal context. Hokku are both written and read within the appropriate season. If, on reading a hokku, you literally feel the experience it presents, without having to think about it or interpret it, then the hokku has succeeded.
    Not everything is appropriate for hokku--only those experiences in which we feel something that goes beyond words, something in which we sense a significance that cannot be spoken. Paradoxically, these experiences are in themselves the ultimate of simplicity, as in this hokku by Buson.

    Lighting one candle
    With yet another candle;
    The spring evening.


    Hokku is not just a hobby, nor is it a way to make a name for one's self as a "poet." It is a way of life, a kind of spiritual path in which gradually all that covers the essence of our day-to-day lives is removed as all the clutter and dust of the mind is gradually discarded.

    One approaches hokku in this manner, and as one learns one matures, so that learning hokku is not a matter of just absorbing the basic principles and techniques in a week or a month or a year; it is rather a matter of beginning to live hokku, so that between one's writing and one's living there is no difference. And that is the work of a lifetime.

    Here is a recent one of mine called Glass Harp

    Hands aged like fine wine
    Strum goblets with moist fingers
    Celestial ice chimes.


    Dare to write one? LOL!!! I Hope You All Enjoy The Game!!

    {{**~~Kimberly**~~}}

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    Hey PD! Kewl game! I'll give it a try!

    Grandma's quilt comforts,
    while watching hot embers glow.
    Snow melts on the roof.


    Posted By Altree94 | Jan 13, 2007
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    Though the sun rise
    gently and pretty. Soon
    the kids snowball.


    kinda outside the 5-7-5 syllabic scheme - but I hope you enjoyed such seasonal hokku.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Jan 13, 2007
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    Beautiful Hokku's Ms Tree and Ms Jacquii!!!!!! Thank you!!!
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    Here are two pieces I did awhile back...

    Spider Walz

    Sweet Sustenance
    Geometric pearls
    Woven acrobatic silk
    Such graceful deceit.


    Sahara Sunset

    When cherubs wake
    Sienna glazed rays
    African moon painted breath
    Plays anthem upon clouds.
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    Daddy Dearest

    He quickly left me
    Standing on the wet sidewalk
    Almost fatherless

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    Vertically plunging,
    dropping like a ball of lead,
    descending spider.


    Posted By Sartor | Jan 20, 2007
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    Nomad...that is some Hokku!!! My mind is going in circles.

    Sartor....simply exquisite.....you indeed are a Master in Spinning words!

    Thank you guys....these are wonderful!

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    Slow, slow, quick, quick, slow
    pulsing beats the hot tango
    embered hearts aglow


    Posted By Sartor | Jan 22, 2007
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    Beautiful Sartor...one Haiku / Hokku a day will help keep writers block away!!!!

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    Rain Cometh

    SShh! Can you hear? Rain.
    Her raindrops are like kisses,
    Smiles the Desert Sand.




    Whisper

    I can feel your breath.
    Come closer, speak slower- now,
    I hear your Whispers.


    Posted By v3sista | Feb 4, 2007
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    Wow! Great writes YAWL - I was just thinking about magnolia and honeysuckle - two of the sweetest smells in all of Tennessee:


    Tennessee Corsage


    honeysuckle blooms
    fair magnolia sways: suddenly
    the two united


    Anyway - middle line is 8 syllables...
    Just thought I'd give it a try :blush2:

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Feb 7, 2007
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    Fantabulous hokku's Ms V, and Ms Jacquii!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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    Thanx KIM - was merely trying to break the tedium of WRITERs BLOCK :)

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Feb 7, 2007
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    Blank sheet on the desk
    Word guide and dictionary
    Poet's writers block


    Posted By Sartor | Feb 8, 2007
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    :chuckle: @ SARTOR
    I've actually been laughed at for reading Roget's Thesaurus for fun LOL
    So - yeah...... Anything to break the Writers Block

    ALSO - crazy hokku :p

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Feb 8, 2007
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    Northern Lights

    Pastel curtain hues
    Electrical magenta
    aurora sky lights

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    Fleeting, quivering thing
    alights upon my finger
    And then quickly pasts


    I give out my heart
    And you move to go take it
    And tear it in half

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    Snow melting away,
    breaking up of river ice,
    spring begins to sing.


    Posted By Sartor | Feb 20, 2007
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    mangodroplet Blue Mango Puppy :]

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    wah....

    Sartor is good at Hokku making :]


    hmm...

    Noodles steaming hot
    Make my tummy really glad
    And then I an full


    yay! sorries, hungry :]

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