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Discussion in 'Miscellaneous' started by Sartor, Jul 23, 2007.



    Sartor JPiC Contributor

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    THE WEAVER
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    Within the dark and musty room
    Mid spools of yarns and thread
    The shuttle flies across the loom
    Dream fabric to inbed
    .
    Stacked by the walls are plots and schemes
    Of every shade and hue
    Yarns of emotions for the dreams
    And threads of false and true
    .
    Within these walls where dreams are born
    The weaver plies his trade
    'Tis here where hearts are broke and torn
    And here were love is made
    .
    The Weaver sits hunched o'er the loom
    To weave the threads of life
    Emotions floating in the room
    Of happiness and strife
    .
    So come thou Weaver weave for me
    Your weaving I await
    Let me fulfill my destiny
    And let me meet my fate
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    Sartor
    • Love Love x 1


    Posted By Sartor | Jul 23, 2007
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    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    Hi! This is so beautiful Sartor.
    Great rhyme and it flowed nicely down the page.
    A very impressive write...loved it!


    Posted By Moonchild | Jul 24, 2007
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    Sartor JPiC Contributor

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    Child of the moon..........thank you for your kind reply. I am delighted you enjoyed the rhyme.


    Posted By Sartor | Jul 24, 2007
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    Jer4clarity Lover of Meanings

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    Sartor,

    You always seem to make rhyme look so easy. And the content is so wonderfully crafted. My Fav:

    Thanks for sharing!

    Jerry

    Sartor JPiC Contributor

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    Thanks Jerry......glad you enjoyed the poem.


    Posted By Sartor | Jul 25, 2007
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    Dear Sartor,

    One cannot help to get captivated and totally enthralled in your flawless and impeccable rhymes. Simply exquisite. You are a great teacher also. You make me want to try my hand at another rhyme from your teachings. This flowed like a natural spring, and was cool and refreshing. I also love the content, as I love when poets craft poems about things we may not think about or take for granted. Superb!

    Kimberly :)

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    Thanks Kim..........I will see if I can come up with something, for you and others to try, in the way of a new form of poetry. Soon as I can find the time to mess with it a while.


    Posted By Sartor | Jul 25, 2007
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    This makes me think of a book I have read called "The Lost Girl"
    In your writing I imagined a the weavers monotonies Joy and woe for creation of destruction.


    Posted By BloodyTea | Mar 17, 2016
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    Sartor JPiC Contributor

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    Greetings BT,
    The Weaver is a metaphor for creating creation.


    Posted By Sartor | Mar 17, 2016
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    Sartor JPiC Contributor

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    Hi Kim,
    Can you imagine my surprise at receiving replies from poetry I wrote nine years ago? Amazed, I am simply amazed.


    Posted By Sartor | Mar 17, 2016
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    What a lovely piece, your rhymes are effortless


    Posted By AJ09 | Jun 5, 2017
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