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    The Woods
    A weighty feeling in my stomach,
    swirling sluggish,
    Forces to surface my abashed
    and guilty blunders.

    I brushed aside all bended ties
    kept fear of breaking far from my mind.
    Deaf to the deft,
    bereft of sense,
    lead headlong to harm
    whatever was left.

    I'm not out of the woods yet.

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    Great poem, full of depth and sensitive feelings.

    Thanks for sharing your poem :)
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Nice piece. Thanks for the share.

    I wasn't quite expecting where it would lead me once read, but this really is an interesting couple of stanzas here. Makes me wonder what exactly are "the woods" --- I agree with Morning Star ==> A subtle shaping of words, full of depth.

    What inspired this write Minellis'Vertigo?

    J.
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    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Jan 27, 2013
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    Minellis'Vertigo Member

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    Hi Jacquii
    thanks for your comment. Not out of the woods yet is just a phrase/idiom which means something has improved but isn't good or completely better. I can see how the title is kinda misleading, I didn't realise before - it made sense to me so I took it for granted that everyone would get it! Thanks again I appreciate the comment.
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Oh yeah. I know the phrase "out of the woods" --- I was just thinking on a greater...quantified type level... Meaning - your poem is a short piece. I wonder if you were to evolve it into a larger work - what would the figurative "woods" truly prove to be. If that makes sense...

    Sorry about the confusion. An enjoyable write though - so thanks again for the share ;)

    J.
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    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Jan 28, 2013
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    i love it full of meaning and somehow the tone give some hope that eventually u will be out of the wood.. very nice :yay:
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    buenas noches poetisa? Have recently indulged this dwarf & was left with a yearning, a good yearning to excavate more of the narrator’s honest intentions, or what exactly where the dangers/ obstacles to be overcome? This is also why i treasure such compact- canvases where less is often more. Also feel they are the most challenging to get something conveyed with much clarity when playing with a limited budged come words. i’ve forever been a fan of vivid imagery and this set the scene wonderfully,

    “A weighty feeling in my stomach,
    swirling sluggish,”

    …I'm not out of the woods yet.”

    Glad to have partook in this, keep striving yeah. One-
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    Ha! completely misread your comment, I see what you were saying now. Thank you for the feedback.
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    Thank you for the comment, I appreciate it a lot.
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    JONATHAN living not existing.

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    This is righteous and encouraging .. One day we will all be out of the woods only to encounter another one and that's life .. Beautiful reminder.
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    Posted By JONATHAN | Feb 18, 2013
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    LOL - No prob - I probably needed to have reworded for clarity :p
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    I love this optimistic thought, that we can walk out of the perilous woods into a wood that is life unencumbered by what often feels like the blinding forest of humanity. You know the saying, "Can't see the forest for the trees" and all that jazz.... Yeah.

    Interesting comment Jon :peace:
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    Hi Jonathan thank you very much for the comment
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