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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    LOL - I was surfing just moments ago and came across this poem I wrote earlier this year. Inspiration for this poem: sometimes I just hate men so fuckin' much... So without further adieu...


    This Is Mine: Ass

    I own this ocean.
    How dare you
    Have thought
    About the process of division?,
    You untamed
    And unkempt geometric square.

    Know you naught (yet)
    That the world you seek
    To inhabit
    Is as round as my fat ass?

    Know you naught?

    This world blinks
    Upon my supple and pugnacious
    Crown - dare you deny
    It? Dare you deny to know
    The subtle meaning
    Of woe your hate causes
    On the seven seas
    Of your own turmoiled pride?
    Dare you
    Know the bling
    That resides in your own
    Weeping eye, stagnant and dead
    Like the story of Rapunzel?

    Know you naught?

    Repeat with me if you dare
    One good thing
    (Kind gentle man
    that you claim to be)
    If you will please:

    "You're fired!"

    Apprentice me no more
    Knot of my pugnacious belly!
    I own this ocean.

    You know what? Fuck
    You.

    Copyright © 2006 Jacquii Cooke


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Nov 21, 2006
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    PaintedDiary JPiC Mentor

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    Oh I love this one. Very real with raw emotion. The last lines are priceless and gives the reader closure as well as a flavor of the person painting the scribe. Excellently executed and well written with bold taste, a message, real emotion, sauciness, class, and Ms Jacquii style!! Thanks for sharing!!!

    Painted

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    damn ya methaphors and similes are deep!
    almost lost me until i read the title again....

    see, i be telling shawties all day about what you saying, tho it's not all exactly the same, there is an underlying principle involved....it's simply the woman's possession and no man has no right to say whatever she does with it...



    that's the line there, alot of girls allow guys to use their "pride" and diminish their inner power and beauty...good mama!


    Posted By yngst | Nov 21, 2006
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    v3sista U Know Me

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    Repeat with me if you dare
    One good thing
    (Kind gentle man
    that you claim to be)
    If you will please:

    "You're fired!"

    Apprentice me no more
    Knot of my pugnacious belly!
    I own this ocean.

    You know what? Fuck
    You.


    And let us say AMEN....

    U sound like I was feelin w/ Playa'z Day. Had 2 go back a break it down to a broken pimp- a real St. Lunatik..it's nice to be able to vent w/ grace. :party-drinks:


    Posted By v3sista | Nov 22, 2006
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    Mysty JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Dear MsJacquiiC,
    Well said and a delightful read! I Love this piece! :huggles:
    ~Mysty~


    Posted By Mysty | Nov 25, 2006
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Thanx YAWL for the lovely comments - I must've been MAD at something LOL - And yes MYSTY - poetry does allow me to vent when need be - 'Tis why I adore Madam Poesy so much ;)

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Nov 25, 2006
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