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    Sartor JPiC Contributor

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    TIME REMEMBERED
    .
    Long ago when time was cheap
    And friendship ran both wide and deep
    We sought our second youth.....
    Mid cans of beer and bottled wine
    At midnight suppers we would dine
    And we ignored the truth
    .
    We played silly little games
    And gave each other foolish names
    And laughed at Father Time.....
    In a smoky cabaret
    Or on the beaches we would play
    And life was so sublime
    .
    Taking trips across the land
    While through life’s hourglass the sand
    Of time did slowly run.....
    Suddenly it came to me
    No longer could I plainly see
    The reason for the fun
    .
    Father Time walked at my side
    I slowed my pace to match his stride
    The truth had come at last.....
    Clearly now I saw the sign
    The grape had withered on the vine
    My second youth had past
    .
    Now I delve in ancient tomes
    And read my many books of poems
    And seldom go to bars.....
    And recall when time was cheap
    When friendship ran both wide and deep
    And watch the desert
    stars
    .
    Sartor


    Posted By Sartor | Dec 12, 2006
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  1. ChrisA Guest

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    my favorite line: "And laughed at Father Time.....
    In a smoky cabaret"


    Posted By ChrisA | Dec 14, 2006
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    I've gotten to an age now where Father time has had to slow HIS pace to match mine! LOL! Thank-you for posting this - it has brought back some wonderful memories and the rhyme and rhythm made it a most enjoyable read!


    Posted By Altree94 | Dec 14, 2006
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    Sartor JPiC Contributor

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    ChrisA......Youth always laughs at Father Time until the wisdom of years eventually brings sober truth to the forefront. I am glad you enjoyed the poem.


    Altree94.......Memories of happy and loving times past are always with us. Thank you for commenting. Skonnakowa friend, skonnakowa.


    Posted By Sartor | Dec 15, 2006
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    Ariono-jovan Labu Member

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    ha-

    i'm not ol' enough to have embraced such times, yet, not so young as for not to recall how life was... lol- the end-rhyme, the flow were all so natural. i enjoyed partaking in this canvas artist. keeping doing what you do. unidos-

    Sartor JPiC Contributor

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    Ariono-jovan Labu........Keep living, loving and laughing for one day when you least expect it......Father Time will tap you on the shoulder and say, "Slow down my friend and walk with me." Thanks for the comments.


    Posted By Sartor | Dec 20, 2006
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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    This is both heartwarming and a warning I think...to take youthful life in huge gulps and enjoy everything, for quickly comes the time when your perspective changes and although life is still enjoyed, that "first love" has matured and the excitement has faded. Wonderfully written!

    Nomad

    Sartor JPiC Contributor

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    Nomadic.......the poem speaks of growing old, which we all must do as time passes. It speaks of the end of middle age and still trying to hold on to the parties, the night life, the fun and the essence of youth, until at last the realization arrives that you are no longer interested in that way of living and it is OK to slow down and simply enjoy the September of your life.


    Posted By Sartor | Dec 22, 2006
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    I also like your personal quote Sartor. It reminds me of another quote:


    For it was not only a man like
    himself who saw what was true,
    the thing we are all in need of;
    innumerable other people also
    think themselves in possession
    of it.
    Musil


    Posted By ChrisA | Dec 22, 2006
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    Sartor JPiC Contributor

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    ChrisA......Thank you for the note. I have always enjoyed proverbs and have many favorites. Here is one that, to me, speaks the truth:

    All Gods and Devils that have ever existed, are within us.


    Posted By Sartor | Dec 23, 2006
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    Dear Sartor,

    This was a poem that I read a few times, :wow:. It is so well written, and took me down memory lane. Thank you for that. The stanzas that I quoted were divine. You are a gifted writer, and your works are masterful. I enjoy reading everyone of your works. I still try to speed up Father time, and he always wins! LOL!!!! Nevertheless, great write! Take Care.

    ~*Painted*~

    Sartor JPiC Contributor

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    Hey Painted........thanks for the words. There used to be five couples that did EVERYTHING together. For years we were just the best of friends (and still are) I wrote this poem to commemorate those golden years we had, taking trips together, going to cookouts, dances, ball games, weekend getaways, etc, etc. Thank you again for writing.


    Posted By Sartor | Dec 23, 2006
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