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    TRANQUIL WATERS

    Tranquil waters
    Of thine evening sea
    Come lapping slowly, quietly
    Upon my shore white and bleak
    Tell me my love
    What dost thou seek?
    Long awaiting thy passion’s peak
    Let thine waters crash down on me
    Like heavy thunder, stormily
    And when thy storm has met the calm
    On thine ocean carry me away, far and long

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    Dear PG,

    LOVE LOVE LOVE this as it reads softly as the calm waters of which you scribe. It is beautiful, and made me tranquil this morning. My mind was jumbled and uneasy until reading this. I feel like I want to just say, "Ahhhhhhh". Love the incorporation of the Old English as it gave it even a more delicate tone. Thank you for sharing.....love ya!

    PD :)

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    Thank you so much for your comment PD! I had this on my blog on another site and although it was received well, I still wasn't sure about it...Thanks again!

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    Oh this is a beauty PG!
    I love the Old English and you did
    a good job with it. I don't know why you
    weren't sure about it, it's a very good poem :)
    I wouldn't change a thing. Love it :giftrose:


    Posted By Moonchild | Aug 26, 2007
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    Thank you for reading my poetry and taking time to comment Moonchild! It's fun to do something different, especially when others appreciate it...Thanks again!

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