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    EeZeBard New Member

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    ~~~
    Hiking through a woodland glen
    as mellow shards
    of sunset bend
    to capture
    bright
    in waters clear
    reflections
    caught
    from mountains shear
    The silhouette sings twilight's best
    enchanting beauty
    north by west
    'Twas then my heart
    forgot to beat
    while visions to my gaze
    complete
    A gentle sigh
    resets its rhythm
    I step toward this face from heaven
    ~
    In twilight's eerie haze she stood
    amongst the tranquil shades of wood
    where timeless paths
    bestow the land
    she beckons
    with extended hand
    Surroundings
    waver
    hardly seen
    I spring a trap
    laid there
    between
    then falling deep
    to darkest dread
    above ...
    the trap
    once more is spread
    ~
    I tumble blind through timeless mist
    as things unseen
    tear clothes to bits
    Attesting shrieks
    bare blackest dreams
    when fingers
    grab
    they choke the screams
    I'm lifted
    tossed
    to brink of ledge
    I scramble
    safely
    back from edge

    Breath wheezed ...

    lungs filled ...

    sanguine air

    but shadows dance
    to flame's despair
    ~
    Perusing cavern round about
    entwined with scents
    of mash and stout
    The shadows fade
    as faces bare
    their eyes unblinking
    strangely stare
    Just who they be I have no clue
    in cloaks of rag
    bereft of shoe
    A boiling pot
    spills
    overflows
    aroma wafts
    to pull my nose
    ~
    As grumbles strike beneath my chest
    a bowl they pass
    I say my blest
    The taste is odd
    but strangely
    good
    then laughs
    coalesce
    beneath their hood
    It strikes me now this tale I'm told
    just echoed back
    from memories cold
    Beware
    the pit
    from beauty set
    where mortal feet
    tread
    with regret
    ~
    I sense
    the danger lurking near
    too late
    I'm thrust
    through worlds of cheer
    round about
    with no control
    immersed in love
    then stripped of soul
    Tears of pleasure
    tears of pain
    round about
    and back again
    Conscious whirling
    twisting
    vain
    Blackness lifting
    drenched with rain
    ~
    Hiking through a woodland glen
    as mellow shards
    of sunset bend
    to capture
    bright
    in waters clear
    reflections
    caught
    from mountains shear
    The silhouette sings twilight's best
    enchanting beauty
    north by west
    'Twas then my heart
    forgot to beat
    as visions through my haze
    complete
    A pondered thought
    sends senses reeling

    'tis déjà vu ...

    I've got this feeling
    ~~~


    Posted By EeZeBard | Jun 4, 2007
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    Sally Roberts Forestdawn

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    Eeze:

    WOW! The rhyming flowed so smooth. It was like drinking a nice warm mug of cocoa.
    I really loved this poem.
    Very, VERY well done. I read it several times. Thanks you for sharing this beautful poem

    Blessings

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    wonderful warning of vaine appearences... this write read like a nursary ryhme... and to me very classic and smooth.... loved how you provided feelings of peace and then the abrupt turn to frightenthe reader with a fall and a great of hooded strangers... witha unlikely brew... wasn't sure wether to take some of the descriptions in this write as metaphorical though..... would like a direct explanation of the overall point the writer was trying to make...
    if that's cool with you freind?
    :)
    phil

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