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Discussion in 'Creative Traditional' started by Mysty, May 7, 2007.



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    Mysty JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Hiya folks.... was daydreaming at work and decided to try a sonnet... this is in the abba abba cde dce format. At least I think it is sonnet..... isn't it??


    The soul of a poet is steeped in rhyme,
    words always tumbling about in their mind
    and if perfect strangers should treat them kind
    it will show in their poems after a time.

    Often their words are really thought sublime,
    with novices minds words appear to bind
    that after a time, they most often find
    themselves trying to poetically mime.

    Yet if a stranger should think to query
    about why words really matter so much?
    Poets answers are often phrased, at best,
    that their word works are only meant to touch
    and to soothe the aestethically weary
    readers who are often at their lowest.


    ©2007 Sandra Elizabeth Johnson


    Posted By Mysty | May 7, 2007
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    Hi Sandra, (Mysty), I thought I would take a look at this forum as you suggested. As I am an active member on 3 other sites I don't know how involved I will be here yet.

    As to your question, there are certain criteria that makes a poem a Sonnet. Some are quite rigid, other flexible. As with most forms, there are fine lines that that are gingerly crossed. Personally, I like to Google a form and familiarize myself with it before trying it out. I believe there is a thread on forms already available here. One I like to reference is http://jpicforum.info/types-poetry/sonnet-795.html.

    I hope this has helped and not told you what you already knew. It would be good practice if you could add the IP to this poem - it might take time - just to give you an idea of writing in meter for when you try other forms, or any style to some extent.

    Happy writing, Terence


    Posted By Terence | May 7, 2007
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    Mysty JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    meh .... I just don't know about this ..... I don't think I like sonnets.


    Posted By Mysty | May 8, 2007
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    wonderful write Mysty
    hugs kisses
    tom


    Posted By Bear | May 8, 2007
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    Ms Sandra...,

    All that abba abba cde
    dce format is annoying
    and confuseing to me.

    It just scrambles
    stuff up in a mess,
    and actually means
    nothing to me.

    Now getting to the
    feeling of your write,
    is another matter.

    It felt light and airy
    and gave information
    while drawing thoughts.

    Quite enjoyed it.

    Thanks for the
    read.:idea:


    Posted By Jeez | May 8, 2007
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    Well, folks, it does seem like a lot to think about.

    But, Mysty, how long would it take to rewrite your first stanza as

    "A poet’s soul is always steeped in rhyme,
    with thoughtful words e’er tumbling in their mind
    and if all perfect strangers treat them kind
    those caring thoughts will write themselves in time."

    You see the difference in how it sounds when read aloud? That flow is something that can benefit any poem you write. :)

    Terence


    Posted By Terence | May 8, 2007
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    I loved this...form or no...words make me see and feel. I am still torn between form and free style writting...do them both, but prefer free style, as it allows me to move easily. I liked this one you have done...I would suggest you keep working with this form until you are more comfy with it, then move on to another form...or, your thing may be free style, as my thing is now. Either way, thank you for sharing!


    Posted By Benny | May 11, 2007
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    Thank You Benny and Again Terence. I used to do alot of rhyming poetry when I first started...... sometimes still do, but I have taken to free form like a duck to water. I think it may be my preferred form.

    ~Mysty~


    Posted By Mysty | May 13, 2007
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    Dear Mysty,

    I too love the free flow of free verse, as I feel uninhibited, and unrestricted, and free to express, and allows my pen and emotions to go buck wild!! LOL I love this poem, like Benny said, form or no-form. You have a golden pen, as I have mentioned before, and with such talent, I see you do one thing best...and that is...following the heart of you and you pen!! Loved it!!

    Kim ;)2
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    Ah - So that we may know, understand and truly respect the worth of the Poet, and her love affair with the Muse!

    I like this sonnet MYSTY - and really over the years the form has become more relaxed, rather than so strenuous. I read something interesting the other day that some people actually think of sonnets as a 14-line poem and nothing else about the form, rhyme-scheme, rhythm or meter... I really think at least one can do is to adhere to the line scheme and stanza format. You have.

    Even more important really than the set format (and please don't tell anyone I said this LOL) is the content! The content of your poem is really definitive of what a poet's job might be: that their word works are only meant to touch and to soothe the aestethically weary

    Those two lines are "real" to me.
    I like this poem very much - It's a nice sonnet.
    Thanx for the sharing.

    Jacquii.

    FYI - more info on the sonnet form may be found HERE.

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    the theme of your write is universal and well expressed.. as with the natural flow of the sonnet... i think words can be orchastrated and used beautifully with scheme or freestyle.... i have read great fun works of art and other melencoly works that produce great feeling as well... all that matters to the reader, in my opinion.. is what amount of passion and heart the poet puts into his or her art.....
    great thoughts and inspiration in this write nevertheless...
    i thank you for your shining talent....

    light and peace to you
    phil

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    Mysty:

    It is most difficult to write a good Sonnet, (for me anyway) I love to challenge myself to all kinds of different types of poetry. It makes the poet aware of what he/she has within them to write.
    Did you know that there are over 50 different types of poetry? A sonnet is just one out of many.

    You have done this one greatly!! And I loved reading it! Keep them coming.

    Thanks for sharing
    Blessings

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