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Discussion in 'Emotional Romantic' started by Tanax, Sep 20, 2006.



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    Yes, you heard right :)

    This is lyrics.
    It actually started with a poem, but it turned soo long, so I desided to try make a song out of it.
    I must say that I'm pretty happy with the result :)
    And at the moment a friend of mine is putting together a music part structure :)


    [Verse]
    Words cannot express,
    the sorrow I feel,
    I wish I could turn back time.
    Cause I have to confess,
    that this is for real,
    oh I wish she was mine.

    As I'm about to leave this worl',
    it's unfair of me to not,
    tell you about this girl',
    that I love alot.

    Her beauty strikes everyone in her way,
    and her hair smells so sweet.
    Noone knows exactly what to say,
    when thy her meet.

    [Chorus]
    I need you,
    I feel you,
    I want this to be true.

    Like the butterflies in the morning,
    you're my other part,
    when you gave me that smile,
    I gave you my heart.

    [Verse]
    Noone could more than me, for her, care,
    I just know that she's the one for my soul.
    I can't take a no,
    because by judging from the special bond we share,
    without her I feel nothing but an empty hole,
    I love her so.

    I can't bare with this pain anymore,
    and I would spill my heart for you,
    untill the last straw of blood falled to the floor,
    untill we're true.

    [Chorus]
    I need you,
    I feel you,
    I want this to be true.

    Like the butterflies in the morning,
    you're my other part,
    when you gave me that smile,
    I gave you my heart.

    [End-Chorus]
    I need you,
    I feel you,
    I want this to be true.

    When walking in the nigh'd,
    flying like a dove.
    I feel so safe with you by my side,
    and the moon protecting from above.



    And here's the music part which is still not completely done yet.
    At the moment this music part covers from:
    http://www.megaupload.com/?d=3Z95MXLA

    And with the previous song which only covers the first verse to the chorus, I've recorded when I'm singing this lyrics.

    You should know that I've recently had a cold, so I'm only singing with a neutral voice in this song, but it should give you an idea how the song part is structured.

    http://rapidshare.de/files/33733687/Tanax_s_song.wav.html




    Copyright Tanax 2006






    Comments? :)
    This is my first song btw.


    Posted By Tanax | Sep 20, 2006
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    Dear Tanax,

    Is there a link? I cannot see it. I would very much like to hear the music part! :yes:

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    Posted By Tanax | Oct 13, 2006
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