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    Mysty JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Unspoken Words

    Did I hear you? Did I?
    well hell yes I did
    but I’m telling You I am tired
    of being treated like a kid.

    Tired of the looks that bellow
    insults to loud for you too hide
    like you are the perfect one
    and I look like something that died

    Yes, I’m tired of the echoes…
    of soft words unspoken
    of the right to receive your love
    like it's a conditionary token

    I am bereft of expectations
    You always have more of me
    than I want you to get..
    I just wish you'd let me be free

    Because I’m tired of the echoes…
    of soft unspoken words
    Because I am leaving you now
    ....yes that is what you heard.


    ©2007 Mysty Johnson


    Posted By Mysty | Nov 1, 2007
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    Mysty JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    OOPS ..... this was inspired by a line of Zaac's poem Soft Unspoken Words. Sorry Erik....


    Posted By Mysty | Nov 1, 2007
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    Sealiah Poetic Dancer

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    I like this Mysty. It's a quiet but firm stance against... whoever it is. LOL. The only verse I'm sort of iffy on is Verse Four. It just doesn't run as smoothly as the other 4 verses. Other than that, It's absolutely gorgeous. Huzzah.


    Posted By Sealiah | Nov 1, 2007
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    Mysty JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Thank You Sealiah added a word to verse four to see it if changes cadence. Seems too.

    Mysty


    Posted By Mysty | Nov 1, 2007
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    Aumakua Misunderstood

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    I like this, the way it rhymes ^.^ I love the meaning behind it as well =D Awesome write :D


    Posted By Aumakua | Nov 6, 2007
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    Mysty JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Thank You Riha ...... Good to see you back hon..

    Mysty


    Posted By Mysty | Nov 8, 2007
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