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Discussion in 'Emotional Romantic' started by zaac, Jun 1, 2007.



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    sometimes late at night
    I hear you calling out.
    It echos from the corners
    of my heart

    I turn to catch your smile
    and the diamonds in your eyes
    And I start to smile back,
    but you're gone.

    I hope its more than
    just a vision;
    more like a
    premonition
    Of things that should have been
    and still should be

    And I'm counting on the heavens
    to hold you once more and forever
    To leave this world with more
    than just your smile...

    more than just the diamonds in your eyes...

    a simple tender love that altered time.

    zaac


    Posted By zaac | Jun 1, 2007
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    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    And I'm counting on the heavens
    to hold you once more and forever
    To leave this world with more
    than just your smile...

    more than just the diamonds in your eyes...

    a simple tender love that altered time.


    zaac you just made rhyme allot cooler than I thought,

    thso ewere great rhymes that still kept meaning five starring it

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    Wow Zaac:

    How uttley romantic. I enjoyed reading and re-reading this one. it melts the heart of the soul.

    Thanks for sharing
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    Dear Zaac :giftrose:,

    This was more than a poem, this was a beautiful Hallmark card. To think of a love that was so divine, that it altered time. :wow:, and still craved and felt. This does melt in my heart, as it is so beautiful. I am so pleased you posted this Zaac. I read it several times. Sometimes I read a poem from bottom up, and try to get another perspective, or hidden message. When you do that, the first line is .......

    A simple tender love that altered time


    and titles jump out here also from that last / first line. One of your best Zaac. Thank you for posting this, I loved it!

    {{{{{~~~***PD***~~~}}}}:girltender:

    zaac Banned

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    thank you very much...every once in awhile a sweet one will sneak out on me lol.

    zaac


    Posted By zaac | Jun 1, 2007
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    bloodletting_of_the_sky New Member

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    this be much a haunting poem, one of dreams.

    projecting feelings of hope and faith that many have dreamed about in some way in thier life... had many wishes like these....

    beautiful dream of yours man.

    Jer4clarity Lover of Meanings

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    YOU have a way!

    Zaac,

    You so easily capture the romantic muse and make her write it down. AND you obviously have someone your muse is watching. Wonderful and heartwarming.

    My fav:
    When an author catches the reader with first line they have'em!!!!!

    Thanks for sharing all this!

    Jerry
    :rockinout:

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    Zaac very romantic and loving.
    handshakes
    Bear


    Posted By Bear | Jun 17, 2007
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