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    Mysty JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    the years without
    we all knew
    what a hardship it was
    growing up with you

    but in my heart
    I knew it best
    I picked you
    from all the rest

    rules were harsh
    and tears were shed
    but lessons learned
    stayed in my head

    love was there
    under the stress
    it was quietly waiting
    for times of duress

    now you are gone
    but I will always remember
    the unconditional love
    you always tendered

    those days were tough
    but not as hard
    as living without you



    ©2008 Mysty Johnson



    Posted By Mysty | Jan 1, 2008
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    mysty,

    unless someone has lost someone, its hard to imagine what this feels like. For those of us who were raised harshly in the name of love know these words to be Gospel truth. You cannot move forward carrying burdens that large, nor were we meant to. When He said cast all your cares on me, He meant ALL of them. It isnt very often you can read a poem , feel the anger and the hurt, shed a tear for the child you could never be, and find peace and grace in your capacity to forigive, not realzing how such a self less act heals you. well penned...honest straight and true.

    zaac


    Posted By zaac | Jan 1, 2008
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    Mysty

    Oh so true Mysty I lost someone a long time ago and it was harder without her I loved her with all my heart and love her even more today. whether dead or living when they leave and you have no way of findinf them that love is very painful
    hugs kisses
    bear


    Posted By Bear | Jan 1, 2008
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    Dear Mysty,

    This was an anthem of truth, and I am sure many many many people can relate to this poem. It was amazing to be in the conversation with you when your inspiration hit, and the result is astounding. When I read I had in my head the conversation and after reading, the end result, I was filled with warmth, and was quite misty in the process. I was moved. Thank you for sharing a window into your past / present life and heart with me in the Chatbox, and here with this poem with everyone. It is one to be cherished. Excellent rating and going into my favorites. Much love sis.

    Kim :hug:
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    Dear Zaac and Bear......... Thank you both.....

    Dear Kim, ........ yes I was astounded too when I read the final result ..... the only problem I
    encountered was ...... I am unable to name it. Thanks Sis for the rating and the wonderful comments.. Love Ya

    Mysty


    Posted By Mysty | Jan 2, 2008
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    Beautiful poem.


    Posted By Hestoria | Jan 20, 2008
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    Thank You Zahra.....


    Posted By Mysty | Jan 26, 2008
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    crazymamma5 angelic mamma

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    I was unsure what the poem was about since its untitled, but I love your poems so gave it a try. I loved it! Nicely written and with much emotion that comes through.
    Definitely going to give it an excellent rating.
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    Mysty JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Wow Racheul :) Thank You so much....... This is a poem I wrote whilst thinking of my parents.... My Mother passed away in 94 from lou gehrig's disease.... or as it is known in other names.. Amyotrophic Lateral Sclerosis or Motor Neuron Disease. My Dad is still alive but he has senile dementia ... and it is hard ..... so very hard to see him like that when he was always a vibrant active man. Again ..... I thank you from the bottom of my heart..

    Love

    Mysty


    Posted By Mysty | Jan 28, 2008
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    Mysty, your poem spoke volumes to me and brought back many memories. My childhood was not easy to endure. Memories of my grandmother's love is the only thing which softens the taunting, at school and home, and the loneliness I felt. I've noticed quite a lot of great writers had an often painful and lonely childhood. I think it's what develops our talent we have too much time to sit and think and observe what everyone else is just too busy to do.

    It's taken years of therapy and vats of tears but I can finally say I'm as happy as I'm going to be, lol. I've met some wonderful and colorful characters in my life, still am, and can now use my memories to entertain others.

    Your memories, of a hard childhood, has been tempered by the knowledge it prepared you to survive in this world. Your mother was hard but loving when needed. I would've loved to have met her. I'm sorry about your father. Watching him leave you before his body does has to be almost unendurable.

    I'm so sorry for your losses. On the other hand, it has brought the world a thoughtful and beautiful poem.

    I hesitate to bring this up considering the subject of the poem but it distracts, for me, from the beauty of it all. On this line...now your gone...your is wrong. 'Your' is a possessive pronoun (I think that's a prounoun my grammar sucks, lol), what you wanted there was 'you're' for you are. It's a common mistake and one of my few pet peeves in writing.

    Once again, Mysty, beautiful!
    Gail
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    Thank You Gail and yes I agree..... we did have lonely and painful childhoods..... and largely still have lonely times. I mean how many of us have been in a crowded room and felt lonely? I know I have. There are so few people I can connect with on a real level because I do not watch the news... it hurts too much. I am a true empath and if I let it ... the worlds pain would drive me insane. So I hide......... egads...... gotta write now. Thank you.... and will change the "Your".

    Much Love

    Mysty


    Posted By Mysty | Jan 31, 2008
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    Mysty,

    Nice one, The stress of Love.


    I think it could be called "Love Stress" or may be not.


    RR

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    i know the feelings of loneliness from childhood all the way up til now. thats why every day i make a memory with my little girl, so she is spared some of that in her lifetime.

    Everyone has the loneliness, but if i can replace it with laughter, then none will be the wiser and she will be much happier.

    zaac


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    What a wise way to raise a child!

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    I know how to feel lonely in a crowded room been there plenty of times. Laughter is the best medicine and usually I have plenty of it, but it doesn't always hide the pain.
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    Thank You George, Zaac, Racheul and Gail....... I am glad you liked this.

    Love

    Mysty


    Posted By Mysty | Feb 4, 2008
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