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Discussion in 'Emotional Romantic' started by erikestabrook, Dec 20, 2006.



    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Would it be so strange?
    I adore you,
    can I wear you in my veins?

    I keep floating on life and love,
    keep a spot for you,
    who knows what we'll become,
    I relax on some Coltrane,
    realizing he opens so many frames,

    for those who float in misery,
    all you have to do is clip those chains,
    where every essence isn't meant to be strained,
    or restrained, some things take different shapes,

    you hold onto me,
    passions spread,
    your the only one that makes me give in,

    Would it be strange?,
    if I wore you in my veins?

    the thirst is plentiful,
    I need you like a river,
    flowing but not yet full,

    draw me deeper in your page,
    every love poem seems like sacriledge,
    since I see no love but on your skin,
    and no love like yours was meant to age,
    unto lifetimes of lovers ways,

    Can I wear you in my veins?

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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Beautifully written ERIK - I actually submitted your post to Digg :yay: --- Part of the NEW vBSEO package ;)

    As a conneisseur (sp?) of jazz - I feel obligated to let you know you misspelled Coltrane lol

    Very nice share!

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Dec 20, 2006
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    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    fixed Coltrane msJ

    thanks allot for submitting my poem to digg,
    thats very cool

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    Erik - that was a very moving read.
    "the thirst is plentiful,
    I need you like a river,
    flowing but not yet full,

    draw me deeper in your page,
    every love poem seems like sacriledge,
    since I see no love but on your skin,
    and no love like yours was meant to age,
    unto lifetimes of lovers ways,

    Can I wear you in my veins?"

    At first I was a bit dubious about the use of "veins" in romantic imagery. I tend to associate veins with varicosities and old age.
    But you pulled it off (no pun intended).
    Well written - and congrats about digg.
    :scores:
    Zvi


    Posted By athlone | Dec 21, 2006
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    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    thanks athlone hopefully my poem will be digged i just realized that the title could make people think its a trick to get them to look at bRitney spears vagina jk, thanks for your pleasant comments and i'm glad you read it before judging it like the title
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    Erik...Lovely write

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    thanks twinks

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