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    The memory is seared in my mind,
    still sizzling as the image slowly cools.
    There are two women, one searches for
    scraps in a trashcan outside of a
    Chicago Walgreens. People stream in
    and out of the building like bees in a hive.

    I can't help but to stare as I approach.
    The women are oblivious to their surroundings,
    the lady who isn't fishing through the garbage
    shouts at a young man ahead of me. Or so,
    it seems, though her eyes aren't focused on him
    and he strides past her, completely unfazed.
    I can't understand the words that flow from
    her mouth, sounding as if she is gargling
    water and speaking at the same time.

    Their clothes are tattered, torn,
    filthy, holding themselves in a hunched
    position. I'm disgusted by the idea of hands
    grouping for food others have carelessly
    tossed away and consuming whatever they find.
    I know it must not only be these two,
    many others go through this practice of scavenging
    as if they are vultures consuming rotted flesh.

    I feel sympathy, compassion, revolution,
    so much at once. We blame the victim for
    the situation that they have put themselves
    in. Using the explanations of they did drugs.
    Whether that be crack, cocaine, heroine, and
    they deserve to suffer for their misdeeds.

    Anyone can become homeless,
    even me. Placing all the responsible on
    the people who live this life is an easy way
    to free our conscience. Just in case if
    what we see haunts our thoughts for not
    helping or choosing not to care.

    Warm underneath our covers with
    the illusion that it can never be us.


    Posted By SarahNSH | May 8, 2008
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    Good ish, you touched on a topic that most don't speak on, and you wrote about it perfectly, and I agree you in your last couple of lines about anyone can be poor. Great write.

    ~ Peace

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    Thank you for reading my poem and replying to it! I see a lot of homeless people so this is a true experience of what happened one day and what I saw. Thanks again!


    Posted By SarahNSH | May 18, 2008
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    great poem and beautifully written right on target with the topic THIS STANZA is the perfect ending because its so true Sarah
    "Anyone can become homeless,
    even me. Placing all the responsible on
    the people who live this life is an easy way
    to free our conscience. Just in case if
    what we see haunts our thoughts for not
    helping or choosing not to care.

    Warm underneath our covers with
    the illusion that it can never be us."
    hugs kisses
    tom


    Posted By Bear | May 22, 2008
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    Very astute of you to realize that it's just the flip of a coin sometimes that has some people on the street and some in a warm bed. It can happen so easily...lose your job, can't pay rent, can't buy food, no friends, no family...what can you do but walk the streets and try to find a corner to hide in...then you get a little more brave about the situation because you realize you still have to feed yourself...then you get dirty and stink and no one wants to come near you...what use are the niceties of society then...you just let it all go. Thank God, there are still a few decent people who will pick up some of the homeless, take them home, give them a bath and clean clothes and find them a home. People are still just people...and we have to stop treating them as if they are animals, no matter how they act like it. They mostly just need some love and care to bring back the humanity.

    Very nice poem, by the way! I love it!
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    Thank you Bear and nomad! Bear, I'm glad that you especially enjoyed the last stanza, that was my favorite too.

    And I totally agree with you, nomad, that it just is really sad with the homeless that you see and especially with gas prices, food prices, and everything on the rise how close can you be to being on the streets as well? I mean, it's just not an impossible thing to happen to anyone... I live in a rather small town so my only experience with homeless deals with the city and I really do pay attention to the homeless in the city, where they are, and I wish I could help them. I have one other poem in this style which deals with three homeless people that I always see on my walk in the city.

    Well, I'm glad that you love it too! This is a completely different style for me and a completely different subject as well... so I'm happy to receive some good feedback on it and thanks again!


    Posted By SarahNSH | May 22, 2008
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