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    gustave3 New Member

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    :robot: The Vietnam of the Modern Age



    the time has come to stop asking for reparations

    for times and crimes long past

    it's time to look inward for the solution and devise a plan of attack

    instead of sitting, complacent on our collective ass

    stop fighting wars that don't benefit OUR cause

    or fill OUR pockets with cash

    executing another mans agenda with a champions swagger

    but in the race for equality, continuously coming in last

    letting fear lead us to forget that

    this nation was forged off the blood and sweat from an immigrants back

    now we build walls to keep our brown brothers out

    but trust me, a wall won't stop freedom no matter how high it's stacked

    and less we forget that those we are trying to keep out

    are some of the same people fighting side-by-side with us in Iraq

    or who proudly cut our lawns or pick up our trash

    but I know it's easy to place blame

    when the white man has, stolen nations; enslaved races

    and built malls and subdivisions on american indians sacred places

    all the while, proclaiming to the masses

    that it's their civic duty to pay taxes

    so the vicious cycle can continue

    not here on american soil

    but coming to you live from a foreign venue

    just goes to show that

    things done by human hands without God's blessing

    stand a snowballs chance in hell

    of accomplishing it's original mission

    be it man made levees to keep the flood waters at bay

    or the so called liberation, of a proud nation

    but the cost of freedom is more than anyone is willing to pay

    as the death toll climbs steadily, day by bloody day

    with self righteous ideals to hide true intent

    and justify the countless dollars spent

    with no accountability, so nobody knows where all the loot really went

    it wasn't to the fathers, mothers, children and spouses

    of the servicemen who were sent

    never to be seen alive again on their own Continent

    fighting a holy war that was never ours to wage

    soon to fill a couple of lines on and encyclopedia page

    under the heading

    "THE VIETNAM OF THE MODERN AGE"







    see, i believe all men where created equal

    but that empowerment needs to start with your own people

    we need motivation, education and dedication

    if we are to raise a strong black nation

    and not just for the sake of our own black faces

    but for all races

    we can't get ahead if the sum of our existence

    can be counted in court cases

    or if the bulk of our young soldiers are in jail

    or dying on military bases

    and some ask, why are the Black Panthers back

    do we really need that rage

    but you see, it was never really about black power but rather accountability

    we don't want our freedom to be lost as easily as the punctuation on a page

    because if the middle east is our "Vietnam of the Modern Age"

    we need to stop the bullshit

    so we can get around to calling a spade, a spade

    hell, if it walks like a duck and talks like a duck

    quack, quack muthafucka

    don't tell me that it's shade over my head

    when it's really yo nuts

    eventually the rain is going to come

    and that lie is go get you stuck

    assed out with my foot planted firmly up yo butt

    because truthfully, we traded rice patties for oil fields

    and still haven't learned when enough is enough

    over thirty years have passed and we're stuck on the same page

    just freshly entitled

    "THE VIETNAM OF THE MODERN AGE"



    Original Thoughts

    By

    Michael Parson

    June, 2006[/CENTER]


    Posted By gustave3 | Aug 18, 2006
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    Intense!

    That poem is alive with its own passion. I wholeheartedly agree with the fact that Iraq is this century's Vietnam.

    Artists of the written and spoken word have a unique position in society. People already read/listen to what we have to say, so it is our responsibility to make our words. Bravo for this magnificent work of Soap-Box Poetry!

    Peace.


    Posted By AmazonPoet | Aug 30, 2006
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    gustave3 New Member

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    Thanks for the nice words. Means a lot coming from a fellow writer.


    Posted By gustave3 | Aug 30, 2006
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    hey gustave how you mix so much cages fire with intellegence makes you very gifted, You've really thought about this subject, and the poem couldn't have been more proud and poignant if it was written by Robert Frost, the length was good you shouldn't have to explain yourslef that long though for me the explanation was the only poem less bright spot as you swore and said soem that that were non-sensiccal good poem though
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    Spoken word in all it's fury - yeah - I could hear Queen Sheeba really getting into the vybe of this work! Very nice actually, though I'd say that the Middle East is not this century's Vietnam, though the similarities are staggering.

    Anyway - don't know very much about Vietnam - but I think the people are more ready for an actual REVOLUTION than they were in 75... Seems people are tired of being 2nd class citizens to a 3rd class bunch of hoodlums with no love... Seems it's not quite enough yet - but I do believe that before I breath my last breaths, there will have been a great and overwhelming REVOLUTION - seems that it's time for Liberty & Justice encounter the great balance of righting so many past wrongs - yeah, we can forgive - but never demand the accountability that our memories will never let go!

    Your words speak of a REVOLUTION of sorts - More a "call-to-arms" or some such -----> I do wonder though, are you on the side of an everlasting peace?

    Really though - Great Spoken Word piece - I feel like I'm a better person having read it! Love the fury in your call and the unashamed voice that demands satisfaction :)

    Thanx for sharing GUSTAVE

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Aug 30, 2006
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    Feedback.....

    Thanks for all the feedback. I really need that in my life. To answer some of the questions....I am interested in a lasting solution but not at the expense of covering up the past. I'm not advocating that anyone dwell on it but to know your past is to be prepared for your future. Some of the lines in this piece may seem to be out of place with the overall theme but I generally try to put all my thoughts in a piece if I'm really feeling them. I look forward to more feedback as I post a new joint today. Thanks guys!!!

    P.S. I have a current CD of my poetry out there and most of my newer stuff has just been captured on disc. Let a brother know if you would like a copy of the old (before the new one is released).


    Posted By gustave3 | Aug 30, 2006
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    I was impressed gustave and yes I would like a copy of the old and I rarely ever buy books or poetry thats parts of the reason i'm at this site but as skilled as your poetry is I can't pass it up
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    Hey GUSTAVE post your links in the Writers Resource forum. ALSO is it available through Amazon.com or other online stores. Let us know and PM me when you've posted the links!

    Thanx,
    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Aug 31, 2006
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    Send me and address and Ill get it to you. I don't have a site for my poetry yet but it should be coming soon.


    Posted By gustave3 | Aug 31, 2006
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