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    Terryanne Chebet New Member

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    It isn't as if the wind cannot speak
    Sometimes in a whisper
    Barely grazing the bougainvillea purple on the porch
    sometimes in a breeze
    Still the creepers on the front door of our holiday cottage sway to its voice
    Creepers still can speak, but only to the foliage underneath
    And this evening, while I sit by the poolside
    In this warm African sunset
    The wind howls
    As the sea comes back home
    stories, trapped in the crushing waves
    Swish, swash, on the wearing down corals beneath our love nest
    white sand on this Watamu shores
    The soft leaves of the bottle brush graze the back of my neck
    caressing my barely there tan
    The birds, they chirp the evening away
    they too,
    have stories to tell
    Memories, some sweet, some hot & raunchy, some...they will never tell
    And most, I will never know....
    my heart longs to hear the tales
    of the wind
    from far away lands
    of the sea, swishing, swaying
    going and coming back home
    of the creepers on the front door
    and the bougainvillea on the porch
    of the artsy driftwood so delicately placed above the bed
    of the sea shells hanging by the bathroom door
    of the canvas painting on the of white arabic walls
    I long to hear the stories they can tell
    But until then
    I shall savor the beauty,
    and this stirring within
    That comes with the wind, the sea, the birds, the creepers, the bougainvillea......
    I shall hide under my thoughts........

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    Terry,

    I liked your material when I read the first one. I don't think i have seen a piece that made my heart and mind pliable enough to roll and lilt with it. I like the way it is written probably pretty much just as you thought it.

    You have a particularly delicate, feminine and strong sweep of a very delicate brush you paint with. It has been a long time since I was so easily moved by a piece. Now you have my attention.

    zaac


    Posted By zaac | Mar 26, 2008
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    Mysty JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Jesus Zaac ...... lol you make yourself sound like a stalker. I do agree Terryanne you have a marvelous writing voice and I shall enjoy reading more of yours.... I think one of your lines has inspired me.


    Mysty

    PS :welcome3: to :j::p::i::c:


    Posted By Mysty | Mar 26, 2008
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    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    This is beautiful and perfect for spring coming.
    I enjoyed the places it took my mind.
    You do have a way with words and images.
    Very well writ and lovely piece TerryAnne
    and wellcome to JPIC...looking forward to reading more from you :)


    Posted By Moonchild | Mar 29, 2008
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    Terryanne Chebet New Member

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    Thanks people...it was a very questioning moment, when I wrote this piece, so much i wanted to know then, when better still, the less i know, maybe the better! Thanks again.

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    I loved this piece, it took my mind and heart on a visual journey -your journey, it was like you made it easy for the reader to feel what you felt about this place full of memory as if it were the reader reflecting on something dear to them, that is a gift indeed!!!

    -MrsRivera


    Posted By MrsRivera | Mar 31, 2008
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    PaintedDiary JPiC Mentor

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    Dear Terryanne,

    I read this several times and with each read it gets more intense. :wow: This is simply breath-taking and exquisite. The word choice, execution, concept, and is quite mesmerizing. This is going into my favorites and an excellent rating. Again...:welcome3: to the Community, and I will be looking forward to reading more of your fantabulous work. That last line was memorable and will make this piece linger. I could not quote a favorite part or line without quoting the entire piece. Love it!

    Kim :)

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    a stalker?...lolol i was just expressing thats all. i didnt ask to get married or anything.


    Posted By zaac | Mar 31, 2008
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    o_O LOL

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    Hello TERRYANNE and welcome to the Community - I see you haven't introduced yourself - so if you like - feel free to introduce via the Member Introductions section. :yes3:

    But oh my! What a beautiful beautiful poem you've shared with us - the visuals are simply thick and quite pungent in my opinion. You've painted with such descriptives it almost comes alive - especially can almost hear the crash of waves and smell the delicate scent of budding bourgainvillea.

    This last 4 lines just emphasizes what a delicate and beautifully serene landscape you've painted with your words - A really relaxing and nice read! Thanx for sharing it with us ;)

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Apr 4, 2008
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