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    santui New Member

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    some girls were made for money
    fancy cars
    diamond rings
    a guy on each arm
    with their heart in her palms.
    almost everything.

    some girls were made for crying
    shattered hearts
    broken dreams
    trying hard to smile
    when she's dying inside
    walking on broken glass.

    some boys have made a fortune
    by the age of 31
    got a mansion on a hill
    a million dollar grin.
    almost everything.

    some boys just make a dollar
    for a hour in the sun
    getting used and abused
    never get to choose
    walking on broken glass

    wishing on shooting stars
    four leaf clovers and rabbit paws
    knocking on wood
    never did any good
    but their knocking anyway
    looking in their tea leaves
    begging the fates, "Please
    deal me another hand
    cause i just cant stand
    walking on broken glass.


    Posted By santui | Oct 21, 2006
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    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    great poem san,
    catchy, cool, and witty very good submit
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    Dear Santui,

    This piece here was quite powerful in its poetic structure, layering, and meter. I love the contrasts of the highs and the lows...they are great, and wonderfully painted. It reads like a storem (my made-up word for a poem and story combined). You gave me an ideal for a painting that I will do. Again, great stuff artist. Take Care.

    Painted

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