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    Watery Ways



    cumulating clouds-- sprinkles above
    heaven endowed-- down pourings of love

    her watery ways-- riding her rivers
    mysterious waves-- geysers delivered

    glaciers to savor-- flurries of splendors
    ice-creams of flavors-- snowflakes so tender

    freshly sown snows-- sailing her seas
    fomenting flows-- spawned pearls to be

    raining her dancing-- she filters man’s air
    snowing her prancing-- dousing despair

    spring drops of duty-- gracings of green
    a bubbling brook beauty-- waterfalls serene

    bathing anticipations-- tearings of joy
    stormy precipitations-- floating boats of a boy

    enticing her forms-- the lily of life
    hot springs of warm-- sprinkler of spice

    her watery ways-- swimming in swirls
    mysterious waves-- surfing her curls

    her misting eyes-- quenching of thirst
    monsooning sighs-- the deluging burst

    lightning and thunder--- twinklings and splashings
    snowflakes of wonder-- drenching and flashings

    tranquilling pools-- moist kisses sublime
    steamy spent fuels-- perspirations in time

    cumulating clouds-- sprinkles above
    heaven endowed-- down pourings of love





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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    This is absolutely breathtaking George! I could read it forever! Intricate and delicate pairings...and never-ending dance of delight, this piece.

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    I looooooooooooove this style it is so, so astonishing how well it flows and your choice of words were amazing. everything seemed to be put together very well. This is definitely something you'd have to read more than once to make sure you got everything and the best part is you would want to read it again after the first part. I want to quote a piece of your work that caught my eye...

    glaciers to savor-- flurries of splendors
    ice-creams of flavors-- snowflakes so tender

    freshly sown snows-- sailing her seas
    fomenting flows-- spawned pearls to be

    raining her dancing-- she filters man’s air
    snowing her prancing-- dousing despair

    spring drops of duty-- gracings of green
    a bubbling brook beauty-- waterfalls serene


    This is awesome. It seems to be a fairy tale the way you put the woman in their and the enchanting beautiful weather that is surrounding her. Thanks for the read;


    Posted By KingAce | Sep 16, 2007
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    reasonrhymer New Member

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    Nomad and KingAce,

    Hey, thanks for the responces. And King really thanks your response brightened my day.


    lv,

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    great imagery ... great words ... great piece of work ...

    aren't we all made up of two thirds water? guess that's why your poem flowed so well ...

    excellent stuff...


    Posted By Jims Inn | Sep 19, 2007
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