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    What is the coin that shall be used
    to pay the debt of those abused?
    And what is the count of that coin
    to pay for those we’ll not rejoin?

    To he who lost his life in vain,
    to she whose children now lay slain.
    To brothers nevermore be seen,
    to sisters defiled in their teens.

    The clerics never truly sane,
    to say “God’s Will” that they be slain,
    and they have all gone very mad
    to claim a truth they never had!


    Posted By Storytime | Dec 7, 2006
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    Wonderfully written...and what great truth it raises. I liked this work!


    Posted By Benny | Dec 7, 2006
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    Dear Sid,

    You weave a truth that we often don't realize in this canvas. The range of your work from what I have read thus far is fantabulous. The title alone stood out like the universe. Bravo Poet / Storyteller, Bravo. Thank you for sharing this.

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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Wow! Hey STORYTIME - this poem is a piece of deepness - Some people think of the more traditional poetry (rhyming poetry) as not capable of being anything but laughable little child game.

    Within your rhymescheme - however - lies a brilliant piece of poetry that asks a poignant question. What will you pay for your ticket through the gates of heaven?

    Anyway - that's how I read it - Very interesting...

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Jan 15, 2007
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    Sartor JPiC Contributor

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    Storytime.........I enjoyed the rhymes in tetrameter. Your poem carries a message of truth and finality with it.


    Posted By Sartor | Jan 15, 2007
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