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Discussion in 'Emotional Romantic' started by missc, Sep 4, 2007.



    missc New Member

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    What is This?
    By: Infatuated

    What is this at my door
    Offering infinite happiness?
    Serenity. Understanding.
    What is this
    Left alone and abandoned on the day I was made for him?
    What is this
    That ignites my interest yet hinders at the entrance of your heart?
    Makes me Happy. Content. Whole.
    Carry joy in his smile, his touch, each stroke
    Life isn’t the same any more. Chaos drowned by affection and attention
    Mr. Right- my tranquility in Life’s storm
    What is this that loves his children more than himself?
    A father. A hero. An endangered species.
    Strong Black man determined to achieve
    The American dream.
    A skilled craftsman with hands gentle like aloe
    It does not make sense. A dream? A façade? Potential?
    My fantasy fulfilled in every way
    Tenderly 22 I await his realization of his destiny-
    My superman. My relief. My escape.
    What is this that confirms the notion-
    “Good things do happen to good people”
    Lord knows I deserve this encounter. Friendship. Romance.
    What is this
    That suffocates my heart in fear while simultaneously bringing nourishment to a starving soul
    What is this
    That trigger tremors from passion from the faintest smell of his presence
    Or the slightest marvel of beauty before him
    Silent feelings expressed.
    Transported through earth shattering love making
    Is this love?
    Lust?
    Intense attraction?
    Is this love
    That sort of happened out the blue between you and me?
    Is this real? I must be dreaming.
    If I am, waking up would be the nightmare
    This,
    This feeling warms my spirit, humbling my inner inhibitions
    Subjecting my heart to forsaken vulnerability, and potential heartache
    What is this
    That makes my Nile flow ferociously every second I’m near him
    Kissing him. Feeling him.
    What is this that challenges my imagination to
    Endless daydreams of intimate exchange of gratitude
    What is this?
    Wanting you inside me .
    SLOOOOOOW.
    FAST.
    DEEP.
    FORWARD.
    CANDLELIT.
    NAKED.
    Is this really happening?
    One month and I am gone
    What is this
    That allows me to instantly connect with your children
    Maternally. Naturally.
    You ask, and I shall do.
    What is This?


    Posted By missc | Sep 4, 2007
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Hi COMIKA - 1st Welcome to the JPiC Community - Feel free to introduce yourself via the Member Introductions section.

    2nd - I like this poem - The Title "What is this?" Gives way to many answers within...

    Makes me Happy. Content. Whole.
    A father. A hero. An endangered species.
    A dream? A façade? Potential?
    My superman. My relief. My escape.

    I like how you structured the 3-sentence lines. Creative actually - Makes the poem come together quite nicely whilst keeping the "What is this?" in the readers mind - a subliminal of sorts - Very nice!

    Thanx for sharing AND Again = Welcome to the Community ;)

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Sep 4, 2007
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    KingAce JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    This is very sensual. It has one of those vibes where you're at a cafe or lounge listenin to a poet on stage and the whole room is dark except where the poet and microphone are on stage. It entraps you early when you ask the question "who is this?" that automatically caught my attention and then when you described what this man does to you. Gosh makes me wanna take notes and step my game up some. Beautifully written from start to finish with no beatin around the bush with metaphors and such it is just straight forward action and intensity throughout...Thanks for the read;


    Posted By KingAce | Sep 16, 2007
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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    missc...this is a very beautifully carved award to the man in your life, and encompasses all the love, fear, and addiction to the emotions that you feel.

    :welcome3: to JPiC!!

    Thanks for posting such an awesome piece first time out! Loved it!

    Nomad

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