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    Crazymamma5 and I are writing a book in the fantasy genre, Eilia. In it, Zare a horse will have a role. During a flashback, Zare becomes telepathic and aware of the world around him in a more human way.

    Trying to write that transition, I came across one problem. I couldn't come up with his first word! I tried to think of what a horse's first word would be if he suddenly was able to think like humans.

    I thought of wow but didn't like it. The closest I've come to deciding is "Whoa!" but thought that too obvious, lol.

    I've found it's harder to think like a horse than I it would be, lol. Anyone have a suggestion?

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    What about "Goodness Gracious!!!!!" "i guess it depends on what's the horse is trying to articulate at the time he gets his linguistic skills.

    Nomad

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    most likely the horse would see something and identify it with a word.....that is how people learn to speak....so i think the first word would be an object....something solid...like man....or hay....or carrot...!!!!

    or sugar-lump:)

    good luck!

    sol


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    butchiesmom JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Thanks, solo! I'm still not sure yet, but taking suggestions, lol.
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    make one up and say it means vision of god


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    butchiesmom JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    What does God have to do with a fantasy horse? lol
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    How about an idea like this Gail...

    "H-H-H-ell-ooooo" Zare spoke aloud to a faun, who'd been sitting next to a tree. It was a surprise to them both as Zare and the faun heard the human word for the first time. Zare had to speak it again. "H-H-H-ell-ooooo"


    Just a suggestion.. Good luck in your fantasy book. Please keep us informed on it's progress.

    Blessings
    Sally
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    butchiesmom JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    This creature will be the comic relief in the story so my first thought was "Wow!" but thought that much too modern of a reaction. My second thought was "Whoa!" and thought it, at first, to be more west coast than anything but have been going back to it repeatedly!

    I thought that since it's one word Zare would have heard often it made sense. I like your idea though and will be talking it over with crazymamma!

    Thanks, Sally!
    Gail

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    You're very welcome Gail :)
    Whatever word you and crazymomma select the horse to speak, we know will be terrific!

    Good luck with the book.

    Blessings
    Sally
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    Hi Gail,

    I like this idea as well from Ms Sally, and seems natural. Good luck to you and CM5! Love yas'.

    Kim :)
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    Thanks, Kim for your input as well! Sometimes it takes a few days for an idea to sink in for me. Ms. Sally's idea is a good one and one which would seem more natural.

    Racheul and I will be thinking of this. I know she's working on it since I wrote two versions and she's trying to combine the best of both.

    hugs,
    Gail

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