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    PoetryInMotion PoetryInMotion

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    "When Your Gone"


    The love they shared is gone

    But the memory of love

    Lives on

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    She counts the costs of what

    She lost only to grieve for the

    One she loves

    -

    So young and beautiful

    What will she do

    Embraced by his spirit

    Her hearts no longer

    Cold

    -

    Standing over his grave

    She’s in deep thought

    The bed they shared together

    The nights he just held her

    Not excepting anything in return

    -

    The times he delicately

    Held her face

    In the palms of his hands

    -

    The first night she wanted him to

    Make love to her

    He just kissed her forehead and said

    Goodnight

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    This was the night she truly fell in love

    With him

    When they did make love

    He was so gentle

    -

    The way he kissed her

    The way he touched her

    The way he embraced her

    Just the way he made her

    Feel like a woman

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    Why did he have to get up

    And go to work

    Taking for granted we would

    See each other again

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    The love I have for him

    The love I want from him

    Is now just a broken chain

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    A tear runs down her cheek

    The cool breeze brushes up

    Against her cheek

    She shivers

    Trying to stay warm

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    She feels his embrace

    Her heart feels his warmth

    She smiles

    And hears his voice

    Everything will be alright

    By Arthur Henn


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    Mysty JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Beautiful Art...... Arthur you make me feel this.. Goosebumps. And You know ... I have often thought that what would I do if ... but I dare not contemplate....... I think I would go wild lol. No sense in teasing myself with those thoughts. Anyways... as always you have written a wonderfully inciteful piece. I love it.

    Mysty


    Posted By Mysty | Sep 29, 2007
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    Hey now PIM,

    Another great write of love and remembrance... A reminder that we never know when it's going to happen, but know it is going to happen... (and here I have to get up to go to work later)....
    Art, nice pen ya got there.....


    Posted By lasher | Sep 29, 2007
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    PoetryInMotion PoetryInMotion

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    Mysty, thank you for your generous comment. I have a very broad imagination and many times through my poems i will take realty and mix it with the what ifs coming up with stuff like this.

    Lasher, Thank you my friend...Yes we do take our paths to work when we leave and we take for granted that we will return home...We never no.. And yes we will be exiting out of this world and into the arms of another. We never know when.

    Thank You..Both Of You!

    Art (PIM)
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    PaintedDiary JPiC Mentor

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    Dear Art,

    :wow::wow: You sent my mind on such a journey. Reading this makes one just stare at the screen afterward asking.... "What if....?" You have woven a modern day fairy tale here. A lifetime within those stanzas are real, full of emotion, real pain, and the after. I loved how you smoothly transitioned into the stanza when he was gone, that was brilliant. I felt the love, the chill and felt her pain. Just the perfect word combinations, just enough words, to deliver just enough emotion. Each stanza plays out like a movie and I could envision each stanza as a painting. This is memorable and executed flawlessly Art...just what I would expect from you. :bravothanx:

    PD :)...just wow!

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    *cries* TT.TT It's so sad... yet kinda happy at the same time.... Poor lady that lost her lover =**(


    Posted By Aumakua | Oct 2, 2007
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