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    AshleyB527 New Member

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    His radiating glow
    Illuminates my darkest world.
    His arms hold me so warmly.
    A place my fears become unfurled.

    To his soothing voice,
    and to his loving gaze I'm drawn.
    One minute he's my dream man.
    Then, in an instant, Dream Man's gone.

    The man who shines so brightly,
    is now nowhere to be found.
    Instead, a man of darkness comes,
    Emerging from the ground.

    He stands so cold and timid.
    To cheer him up, there is no chance.
    He'll strike without a warning.
    I stand degraded in a trance.

    His voice can speak of nothing,
    Except of hurt and angered rage.
    His eyes can't see his happiness,
    That's locked inside a cage.

    He crushes me until I break.
    I get my things to pack.
    I'll wish I had my Dream Man.
    Then, in an instant, He comes back.


    Posted By AshleyB527 | Apr 11, 2007
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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Wow, Ashley...nice write...I can feel the love, confusion, despair, from exhilaration to depression then ending on exhilaration again, or does it end with a more wary acceptance, knowing that he might disappear again?

    Great show of emotion!! :lol3:

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    Nicely written

    Nicely written


    Posted By Poetry | Jul 19, 2007
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    mistyllspoetry Billy Corgan's Shadow

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    Nice work. Isn't this so true.
    Neat feelings you have.

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