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    If I drink you....will I float in blissful intoxication?

    If I want you....will you satisfy my craving for you?

    If I dream of you...will our silhouettes dance majestic shadows?

    If I say your name....will you come to me willingly?

    If I dine on you....will you taste of honey and myrrh?

    If I look for you....will you leave tracks in the sand?

    If I think of you....will you imagine feeling my lips to yours?

    If I touch you....will you let go of what was, and let me make love to you now?

    If I love you...will you accept my invitation for better or for worse?

    If....only I knew....who you were....

    ~*Painted*~ ;)

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    :wow: oKAY! That's what I'm talkin about right here.... Damn, Lady! There U go again! :fan1:
    Serious questions here, I want all the answers emailed 2 me...:mail:
    I think we should come up w/ something like this, representing what we want. Kim this is nice, read it several times, then saved it to my Favs!!!! :sheeplove:


    Posted By v3sista | Dec 29, 2006
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    Playing with the possible answers:

    Only if you drink what slides from my lips,

    Only them thats ate the pie, knows if it took away their hunger,

    Embraced in the moonlight, only it will know where we are,

    The echos of your voice calls to me, 've been charting the way,

    Am all of what you imagine and more, because you want it that way,

    Would only let you find me, when your tired of the play,

    That thought, is what keeps me brushing past you lips daily,

    There isn't ever a was when your near, the moment is always yours,

    With that invitation, all the days would only be better,

    You know me, you call my name.. with every throbbing beat of your cheast.

    Such a lureing write, the mind enjoys wonder.............ing.

    Thanks for the read.. Kim.



    Posted By Jeez | Dec 29, 2006
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    Dear Ms V,

    Thank you so much for sharing time to read and comment. Funny, I was reading about neutrinos and came in my office, sat down, and just wrote this. No idea where it came from. From the looks of Jeez's Fantabulous reply.....she has the answers! Thank you again Ms V, and thank you for including me in your favorites. That is quite an honor, lol.:yay:
    ~*Kimberly*~ ;)
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    Dear Jeez,

    Thank you for sharing time to read and comment. Some say the greatest compliment a fellow poet can give is to join in your writing. Your response is fabulous Jeez, and made me all misty :boohoo:. Stop that! LOL!!! Ya know Jeez, by pure serendipity, I think we just did our first collaboration. The following is inspired by you Jeez, and take care....luv ya'!!!:p:D :thanx2: so much for this, it made my day.

    ~*Kimberly*~
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    If You Were To Know Me

    If I drink you....will I float in blissful intoxication?

    If I want you....will you satisfy my craving for you?

    If I dream of you...will our silhouettes dance majestic shadows?

    If I say your name....will you come to me willingly?

    If I dine on you....will you taste of honey and myrrh?

    If I look for you....will you leave petals in the sand?

    If I think of you....will you imagine feeling my lips to yours?

    If I touch you....will you let go of what was, and let me make love to you now?

    If I love you...will you accept my invitation for better or for worse?

    If....only I knew....who you were....

    Only if you drink what slides from my lips,

    Only them thats ate the pie, knows if it took away their hunger,

    Embraced in the moonlight, only it will know where we are,

    The echos of your voice calls to me, 've been charting the way,

    Am all of what you imagine and more, because you want it that way,

    Would only let you find me, when your tired of the play,

    That thought, is what keeps me brushing past you lips daily,

    There isn't ever a was when your near, the moment is always yours,

    With that invitation, all the days would only be better,

    You know me, you call my name.. with every throbbing beat of your chest.


    {{{~~**By Jeez and Painted Diary~~**}}}
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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful!! Queen Painted and Jeez...Deeply romantic! Now I know the ingredients for that perfect man for Kim's New Year!
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    Dear Therese,

    LOL!!!!!!! We better write down the recipe, because maybe we can sell it!!! LOL!!!! Thank you so much for taking precious time to read and comment. Yes Jeez did a fantabulous take on it!!!! See what your honey can do to turn your "mood" around! LOL!! Luv Ya'. Take Care.

    {{{~~**Painted**~~}}} :bigbug:

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    Yes, Yes, Yes, yes, yes, yes, yes, If only I knew you. You go girl again


    Posted By ronn55 | Dec 29, 2006
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    Don't know what
    should be said, as
    this hasn't happen
    to me before.

    And thanks, it's the :tybow:

    first time anybody
    wanted to do that
    with my writes/me,
    that ' know of.

    Was just playing
    with some answers.

    That somebody as
    interesting as you
    might be looken
    for.

    If really answered.

    Again Thanks..

    Kim.., for shareing
    your canvass with me.

    Will remember this
    always.




    Posted By Jeez | Dec 30, 2006
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    Painted.......beautiful love questions that remain unanswered in the final line. What a sweet set of lines you have written. By no means would I suggest you change your words but if this were my write I would change the following line from:
    If I look for you....will you leave petals in the sand?
    To:
    If I look for you....will you leave tracks in the sand?

    Regardless of what I think, the is a most erotic read. Thank you for sharing.


    Posted By Sartor | Dec 30, 2006
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    PaintedDiary JPiC Mentor

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    Dear Sartor,

    Thank you for taking precious time to read and comment. I am humbled by your comment, from someone of your poetic caliber sir. I call you sir, assuming you are of a mature age. lol I did indeed change the wording, and it reads beautifully. Thank you so much. Take Care.

    Painted
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    Dear Painted Diary, Kim: WOW!!...I was looking for your name and a nice poem of yours. YES!!...You see, I found YOUR OUTSTANDING, MARVELOUS POEM!! Well, I guess, I have finally found the recipe of love that I was looking for, but I´ve never found. I was also reading about NEUTRINOS: the Origen of Life in the Universe. Neutrinos are found everywhere in the Universe, including in the black zones floating among the Galaxies. You are a very interesting lady, my dear sweet Painted, Kim. I would be very pleased to meet you, sweetheart. You are a bit of everything: a Scientist, a Teacher, a talented Writer, a Poet, an Artist, and so on and so forth. It is also GREAT that you are a WOMAN, like me. I am for women. Your Poem is just Good Music to my ears. Tonight, I was in the MOOD OF LOVE. So, I found your poem and the recipe of love. This one would be stored in my personal files, as one of my favourites. Your inner essence glows across the words, in the lovely way you make them flow. You indeed, EXCEL one´s dreams. Good food for thoughts, dear Kim!! Your masterpiece is beyond praiseworthy. I am really GLAD to be here, reading your poetry. Hugs. Sincerely, Stardust.:air_kiss:


    Posted By stardust | Jan 3, 2007
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    Awesome write, you two! Great collab!
    PD - Artists who paint - do they ever do collabs? I have seen paintings with two signatures but only when the first artist dies and leaves the canvas half done - then the second artist will finish it. But I have never seen a painting done by 2 artists at the same time. Do you know of any?


    Posted By Altree94 | Jan 3, 2007
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    Wow PD, that was really fantastic. Not to sound oddish, but it kinda touched me....... Very well constructed and so smooth it rolls off of one's tongue. Nice!!!!


    Posted By lasher | Jan 3, 2007
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    Dear lasher,

    Thank you soooo much for your kind words. As I continue my journey to improve in my writing, these types of comments will continue to be the catalyst for my muse. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. I got misty, to read that it touched you. That is the first time in my 33 years of writing, that someone has told me that a poem of mine touched them. So, I tip my hat to you, as your words made me feel that I have accomplished a milestone in my writing lasher. You have no idea, how you made me feel. Thank you so much.

    {{~~**Kim**~~}} :yes:
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    Dear Ms Stardust,

    I am humbled by your beautiful words :hug:. I am glad that you found something in this little poem that you could relate to. I can certainly relate, as it is my life. Yes, I am a mixed bag, and will use all God has to give through my talents. Thank you for taking precious time to read and comment. Bless you Ms Stardust.

    {{~~**Kim**~~}} :yes:
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    Thank you soo much Ms Tree for your beautiful words:hug: . Ya know, I am humbled by your words, as I am in awe of your work, and the caliber of work you produce Ms Tree. I thank you so much for taking precious time to read and comment.

    Very interesting question you pose, and now I must find out!!!! As of right now, no, I cannot think of any, of the well known variety!!!! :wow::faint: lol

    I have done pieces with another artist here in the town I live in though. It is so soulful to do such a piece, and I have written the poetry to compliment the pieces. Thank you for asking such a fascinating question!!!!!

    {{~~**PD**~~}}
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    Dear Ms. Painted, Kim: I am here back again, reading your lovely poem!! I was thinking about you, sweetheart, especially about this poem of yours. I was wondering over the way you put "LOVE" into words. It´s amazing for me to clearly understand or read another Poet´s mind. It is so lovely for me to read POEMS ABOUT LOVE: "The Source of Life in the Universe." I wish, I could write Love Poems. I guess, I am not able to do it, since I´ve failed so many times trying that sort of wondrous endevour...Your Masterpiece is praiseworthy, sweetheart, again and again and again. Hugs and Love. Sincerely, Stardust.


    Posted By stardust | Jan 12, 2007
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    Thank you so much Ms Stardust. I have failed horribly at that en devour as well, however, as long as I pump that life river red, I will write some love poems as well. LOL!!!!! Thank you again Ms Stardust, and God Bless.

    {{~~**Painted**~~}}:yes:

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